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06-24-2007, 07:20 AM

lol, what happen to Amy? did he have a car accident or probably kidnap?

Ok, here is my sincere comment!!! please don't hate me!!

Overall, it is a very detail decriptive, but it still can be better if you don't put too many detail on so not really important stuff and try to impress the reader with the important part, therefore you can get your most important message to the reader without overload them!!!

But seriously, i don't know cause i don't really read novels, actually this can be seen as the first one that i read . So if i am wrong tell me!!!


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