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ok - 02-19-2008, 03:03 AM

綺麗な女の子、俺の理想のタイプだor 俺の好みにぴったりだと思った。付 き合いたいな、でも、先ず、友ちにならなゃいかん と思った。。。そして。。。

とりあえず、家へ行こうか。帰ることに決めたの時 or 決めた時、誰助けてって声が聞こえた。振り返り、声の主(nushi)or 声のした所を捜したor捜し始めた。。。。

Red means absolutely mistakes.
Green means understandable but odd, If you prefer natural japanese,you should change the words.

Your japanese is not only good but also vivid. I even guess that you are trying to be a translater.

If you find mistakes in my english, please correct them

It's my turn.

すぐに彼女を発見できた。彼女も僕に気がついて、僕の 方に走り寄ってきた。彼女の後ろには、蛇がいた。僕は ・・・

Immediately, I could find her. She also noticed me and running close to me. There is a snake behind her. I...

I have just been aware of the difficulty of this thread.
It will be an unpopular thread. hahaha. This game should be oral.
Someone,please make ending.

Last edited by junkomi : 02-19-2008 at 03:27 AM.
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