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Originally Posted by matt19261
Tis is the plot that i've come up with so far pls take time and review it for me, thnx
Aya escaping her life in effort to find her parents.
There was a king who was in need of a princess to take over for his queen. He had a son, but he was though unfit for the honer of being called king. So the king went to an orphanarium to find a daughter. His pick was Aya Tsukiko, an orphan whos parents whereabouts were unknown. Her only possession was a picture of her parents. As years past and she grew, she learned to swordfight, and that soon became her second priority. Her first priority was trying to find her parents. This made her different from the other feminins, as she would rather train then try to look better for the guys. As a sideeffect to her training, she knew all the guards, as they were the only ones that liked training. She hung out with them alot, so much that she became to like the lifestyle of a fighter then a princess. She liked the times when she wasnt forced to wear, the stupid girly outfits. Despite this, she still uses ediquiet and calls everyone sir or miss. She slowly started hating the life
she lived. Every night she snuck out to the woods, hopeing she would be able to escape her "prison" she called it. Unfortunatly she got caught every night despite her best efforts. However, one night was different, she saw a figure as she was running from the guards. She screams at the top of her lungs right as the guards catch her. The figure only ooks towards her direction, otherwise motionless, screams one last time as the guards pull her away. Hoping that the figure might come to her rescue. But alas, he remained motionless.
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that is very good! i can picture it happening in my head as i read this bit. but i think she should try one more time when something horrible has happened to the kingdom. she trys to help but instead she escapes,becuase someone took her. but knocked her out and left her alone in a snowy village due to some guy.