[noodle]

Just by schiming through it, the only problem I can see is that it's not aimed at anyone particular. When I worked in Gamestation and looked through CV's for them, the first pile of CV's I made were generally ones that seemed to be aimed at them, rather than the more generic CV.

Maybe if you tell me what kind of place you're applying for, I'd probably be able to give you some pointers... Because right now, if you apply for a Retail Job, it doesn't really show that you have any interest in Retail...