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04-01-2009, 12:43 AM

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Originally Posted by MMM View Post
You should avoid using the same word twice as you did with "serfs" in the first sentence. I would even go so far as to say I would avoid using the same subject in two sentences in a row (using "he" or "they" instead in the second sentence.
Okay! I will avoid using the same word in same sentence. ^^ I'll change that to the different word.
Thank you for helping me
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