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Originally Posted by lizzey
Okay I started correcting your essay. Your introduction is a little bit confusing the way you have arrange some words. You just need to fix and take some unnecessary words. If you want to I can pm you some corrections to your essay. Overall I do get what your saying is just some structure problems.
The cause of adolescent children to begin smoking
Your first sentence is confusing. I made some changes.
Children who grow up watching their parents and other adults smoking have higher possibilities to smoke later in their life time.
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Thank you for fixing!
But I do not know what the unnecessary words are...
English is vary hard to learn...
Could you please tell me what the unnecessary words are?
Thank you for helping me