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1) You might consider using "contaminated" in place of "polluted" for it to read a little more smoothly.
2) Also, just so you know, I haven't been leaving any markers where the only change is a deleted word.
Foodborne illness is caused by taking polluted foods and drinks which contain harmful substances. Symptoms are stomachache, vomit, and fever. Our daily lives are becoming much cleaner than in the past; however, this leads to decline of our immunity, so foodborne illness is increasing. In the United States seventy-six million people become ill every year, and five thousand people die every year (Stamey 48). One of the causes of illness for people who live in the United Stated is bacteria. Breaking out and taking out the bacteria’s toxin (I'm not sure what this means?) causes pollution of the foods and drinks, leading to foodborne illness. According to bacterial agents, campylobacter, salmonella, and shigella are detected more than any other foodbourne bacteria in the United States (It was unclear whether you meant more than other bacteria or more often in the US than in other countries). First, infection from campylobacter comes from the meats, such as beef and pork, which are consumed daily; it is a fearful bacterium which causes foodborne illness. The symptoms of campylobacter are fever, stomachache, diarrhea, and bloody feces which are like the symptoms of enteritis (Since you don't discuss enteritis anywhere else in your paper, I would suggest deleting this). When treated, symptoms improve in two-to-five days, but there is also a prolonged possibility of recurrence. Second, infection from salmonella can happen if food is undercooked or raw. Specifically, eggs, chicken, pork, beef and dairy products which are not sterilized and kept at a low temperature have a possibility of salmonella. After infection, symptoms including diarrhea, high fever, and intense stomachache show up within twelve to seventy-two hours, and these continue for four-to-seven days. Third, shigella infection causes symptoms of damage to epidermal cells, fever, and bloody diarrhea to occur in the large intestine tens of times a day. The cause is eating polluted foods and drinking polluted water (“Diagnosis and Management of Foodborne illness” 53).
I'm working on the next one. If I can't get another posted during my lunch hour, I'll try to get it to you before I leave work.
