[YuriTokoro]

Originally Posted by OzukakiBurasuki

It would be better if you slimmed down these three sentences in two longer ones.

"It's hard to believe, to foreigners at least, but many Japanese sleep on the train. Most are sitting down, but some sleep while standing up." (You should probably explain that they hold onto the hooks from the ceiling.)

Hi, OzukakiBurasuki. Thank you.
Is this correct?
“Most are sitting down, but some sleep while standing up holding onto the hooks from the ceiling.”

We have no idea what you are talking about in this sentence, but it is most likely your teacher's reaction to the Japanese sleeping on their train rides.

Thank you for guessing.

"One of my English teachers from the U.S. said he had never imagined that before he came to Japan, but every morning he saw people in Tokyo napping on the train next to him." (You can tell I added information onto the sentence, but it finishes it off well.)

Thank you.

I think the problem with that sentence is that you thought it would be fine to write in present, yet past tense would be used instead usually if you were explaining a situation to someone.

Yes, you are right. I didn’t know I must have used past tense when I explained a situation to someone. I have never noticed that at all.
My English book said that when the situation was likely, I should use present tense. So, I’m confused. I don’t know how to know how likely a situation is.

The last sentence needs just one change. "called" should be changed to "call" because of the situation.

Yes. My English book said like that. This is my mistake.

I know what you are thinking now. What the heck is that? You said you would need to express the situations you were describing in past, then you changed it to present. English is just screwy like that.

Kind of.

There is a bad run-on sentence here. I think for this one, I'll just type what I would've said. The last sentence is fine though.

I’m so sorry.
I should have written “When I got on the underground train in New York, I tried to sleep out of habit, and then I reminded I wasn’t in Japan, opened my eyes quickly.”
Not “When I get on”, because I’ve been to New York only twice. The situation was my first ride on subway there.

I hope this confuses........errr......... helps you more.

Too educational.

P.S. If you were a girl sleeping on a bus in New York, you'd probably get snatched up and raped. Then again, that's just my southern stereotype of New York. XD

When I first visited to New York, I was a girl. (I’m a woman, now.) I thought sleeping on the train was dangerous outside of Japan.
You say that’s your southern stereotype of New York, so isn’t napping on the train dangerous in your town?

Thanks, again.