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08-09-2009, 03:04 AM

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Originally Posted by Koir View Post
Not very many changes needed, Yuri. The main revision was with the explanation of the horse and cow. I changed the sentences so both had the same general structure (compound sentences with a semi-colon) to make it read more naturally. The concepts can be understood and remembered more easily by readers because the sentences are essentially identical and only differ in the symbols and explanations (fast horse, slow cow).

It was a very good idea to connect travel advice between Bon/Obon and Golden Week, as it gives readers an opportunity to reference your earlier posts to the current one. This expands their understanding and keeps their interest in future posts that may have the same advice for them.
Koir, thanks for the great revision and great advice as always.

I have one question.
Does “a day trip” mean single-day?
Many people go abroad for five or nine days. What can I say in that case?
Do I need to write their trips last up to nine days?
How about this? : “Almost 50,000 people departed from Narita Airport today, and they stay abroad about a week.”
Thanks.


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