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Originally Posted by YuriTokoro
Koir, what do you think?
"Fireworks Display"
Every August 15, there is a fireworks display held close to where I live. I watched and enjoyed it again this year.
In the Edo era, people used to shout “Kagiya” and “Tamaya” while watching fireworks displays. Kagiya was the oldest fireworks maker in Japan, and Tamaya was the second. They would alternate their fireworks displays on the banks of a river. Kagiya was in the lower course of a river, and Tamaya was in the upper. People would shout the makers’ names in admiration.
In 1843, the Tamaya Company burned itself and the half of the town in an accidental fire. In those days, such a thing was a felony charge. As a result, the government put an end to the company and forced it to sell all its assets. The master of Tamaya, Ichibee, was banished.
Kagiya still exists, and their master is the fifteenth-generation now.
Nowadays, there are many fireworks manufacturers. So, few people shout “Kagiya” and “Tamaya” during fireworks displays.
Regardless, small children enjoyed shouting "Kagiya" and "Tamaya" this year. Their parents may have told them to shout it when they watch fireworks. Their voices were very cute.
Thank you.
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"Extinguished" is a word used mostly to describe how a fire is put out, so saying a company was "extinguished", to my thinking, doesn't fit the context. Looking at the post again, it seems to read better if the legal and government concepts are explained as "asset forfeiture" may not be known by most of the post's readers.
I'm sure this is not the case, but in compositions where the knowledge level of the audience is not known, it's safer to explain things in relatively uncomplicated ways. This builds up understanding in the audience that they will remember in future posts that use the more technical term "asset forfeiture".
Other than that, just a few different word choices were made, again to increase ease of reading and understanding.
Hope that helps, Yuri.
