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Originally Posted by YuriTokoro
Hi.
Could you correct my English?
"Guin Saga Vol.128"
This is the latest volume of Guin Saga, entitled “Secrets behind the Sacred Shrine”.
Chief of Staff Yona of the Parros kingdom travels to Yaga, the holy land of the Miroku religion. He is secretly investigating the religious community. Yona discovers the people of Yaga are brainwashed as though they are puppets on wires. The magus assigned to protecting Yona is burned in a magic fire. To make matters worse, the community is enforcing a law making it illegal to leave Yaga once they enter.
I really want to know the future of Istavan’s sons! I think I need to wait about 100 volumes, but there isn’t any information about the new author continuing the series. (The original author, Kaoru Kurimoto, died in May.) Istavan has two sons: he has never seen one of them. I’m dying to know whether they are opposites to each other!
Thank you.
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" 'Relax,' said the night man. 'We are programmed to receive. You can check out any time you like, but you can never leave.' "
-- The Eagles, "Hotel California"
Yaga's laws as stated in your post reminded me of that old Eagles song, Yuri. That city doesn't seem to be a very safe place for outsiders...
As for the post composition, only some revisions were made to place sentence elements and concepts in slightly different order to make it read more naturally. I made a guess that "people on wires" meant they were being controlled as though they were puppets with no thoughts of their own. If that is incorrect, please change it to the correct expression.
Also, the part about Istavan's sons was changed slightly. The part where you wonder if the two sons are opposites was changed to better show that the sons are being compared. In this case, the number of items are only two, so "each other" is the proper expression. "Each" is a singular-form word, and "other" can be used in multiple items, but in this case it is modified by "each" to show that the items being compared are singular and not groups.
Good work, Yuri!
