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Originally Posted by YuriTokoro
Hi.
Could you correct my English?
"Election Day"
I went and voted today.
Japan has been under a regime of the Liberal Democratic Party(LDP) since 1994. They have issued too many government bonds, and collapsed the social insurance and pension systems.
Now, the Democratic Party of Japan (DPJ) is trying to take the regime. They say they will revive this deeply troubled economy.
Both parties say they will do things successfully, so I have got leaflets of their manifesto.
The contents seem to be almost the same. My point of focus is the appearances.
The leaflet of the DPJ is a paper folded in the middle, and has four pages. It doesn’t seem to be too expensive, and the four pages are enough to know what they will do. It is good moneywise.
On the other hand, The LDP’s leaflet has 20 pages including the cover. The paper quality is better than the DPJ’s. It gives a good impression at first.
However, the contents were not easily understandable or clear. It has redundant description due to too many pages. In addition, it doesn’t have a table of contents. I needed much time to understand the leaflet’s flaming. I judged that this was a waste of paper and money. I don’t think LDP will be able to quit wasteful use of tax revenue. They don’t seem to be smart.
It’s 1:30 pm, August 30, 2009. The result of the vote will be announced tonight.
Thank you.
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YuriTokoro, I have read your passage , and I must say it's good.
I checked for puntuation and grammar, but I found no flaws untill the last sentence, result, should be results. I may have overlooked but I stand open for correction.
ps.. This shows your english is great compared to some native English speakers.
btw......could you help me learn Japanese.
