Your story is pretty good so far! Only one part has been bugging me.
Beside Adrow
sits a kid; the kid’s name is Kasaki, Kasaki Yuro son of the one who has just been killed. Tears run down Kasaki’s face in his hand he holds a knife with blood dripping down the sides of it. “Dad….” are the only silent words that come from Kasaki’s lips.
Where it says a kid. Wouldnt it sound better if it said a child? I really like it so far 