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Originally Posted by duo797
If I could add a suggestion to Koir's revisions, I would say 'the heir to Guin's Kingdom?' instead of 'the heir of Guin's Kingdom?'. From my experience, when you say someone is the 'heir of' something then you're discussing their family directly 'The heir of Charlemagne' but when you're talking about something they will inherit (like a kingdom) then you say they are the 'heir to' something.
Examples 'Heir to the throne' 'Heir to the Moneybags Family Fortune' etc.
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I believe in the story there are two brothers in that family, so the heir to the kingdom is by no means clear. My revisions reflects that mainly due to previous knowledge of the story elements.