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Originally Posted by Nyororin
I think the whole problem with your sentence is that it would be an okay thing to just say to friends... But you wouldn`t write it like that. Writing の as an ender looks feminine, particularly with that sentence. I find it hard to envision a guy saying that pattern. Not to say you can`t, but it just feels a bit strange.
Either way though, it wouldn`t be written - same with the なんか.
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This makes me feel a lot better about what I posted. It felt quite natural when I typed it (admittedly, quickly while my fiancée was yelling at me to get off the computer so we could go to church—this was my mistake in offering half-considered advice).
I absolutely agree it sounds like something said to friends and not like something that would be written down. I hadn't considered that the card needed to sound any differently, but now that I've re-read what you've written, I find myself persuaded by you.
Regardless, I feel embarrassed by my initial offering, and relieved that I wasn't as completely wrong as I felt after reading your first post. The self-doubt has subsided to a certain degree.
(Whether the recession of my self-doubt is a good thing for JF, time will only tell!)