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Originally Posted by YuriTokoro
Hi.
Could someone correct my English?
Nightmare
This is what I dreamt in the past week.
About one week ago, I bought a lot of herrings in my dream. There were too many herrings, and I didn't feel like cooking them.
After that, the herrings appeared in my dream every night. I knew I should hurry up or the fish would get rotten, but I didn’t. You know the feeling that you should finish a difficult task before it's too late, right? For example; preparing for an examination in school or cleaning the fan in the kitchen. When you postpone tough things to do, you feel uncomfortable, don’t you?
I have been feeling uneasy in the past week without knowing why I felt that way.
This morning I finally picked up one of the herrings. It was rotten.
I put many rotten herrings into a plastic bag. Fortunately, the last one was safe!
I sliced the fish and baked it with potato in my dream.
This is how my nightmare finished.
Thank you!
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Very interesting dream, Yuri. I don't think I've had a consistent dream like that myself, at least not yet.
Most of the revisions were to change particles or verb tenses. Two major revisions were made to convey the concepts clearer with what admittedly may be sayings instead of structured phrases.
Example:
"the feeling that you should finish a difficult task before it's too late"
Early in the post, two sentences were merged to clearly describe the events in your dream.
"About one week ago, I bought a lot of herrings while I slept. I mean it’s just a dream."
was changed to
"About one week ago, I bought a lot of herrings in my dream."
Of course, if greater emphasis needs to be put on the idea this was a dream and not an actual real world event, the sentence should stand as it was originally written.
However, the original sentences makes it seem you bought the fish while sleepwalking. I'm thinking that isn't the right image for the event.
And now, tomorrow I think I'll clean my fans. Have a great day, Yuri! Hope my revisions are of some use.
