[Setsubun]

Thank you so much! That is exactly what I was looking for. I use all of those grammar points all the time, so I don't think he'll find it weird, but like you said if I changed everything he'd probably think it was strangely lacking in it's usual amount of error.

The one single correction I don't understand has to do with the Orihime section. What is the meaning of the suffix でいるわ as opposed to だ in this context? And for that matter, what does just わ mean? I heard my room mates when I was living in Japan use it all the time, but they said they couldn't exactly explain it to me. My boyfriend said girls use it more often, but that's all I know. So it's something I've wondered about for a while now.