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Originally Posted by Umihito
Thanks for those. I've altered the major one and the minor one. And wow, 'gu' instead of 'gi' was really a total basic screw-up on my part 
Are there any more major ones, or are they all minor from here on out?
If you or anyone else reading can tell me any more then I'd REALLY appreciate it.  |
Basically there are a few errors and more awkward phrasings that make you sound non-native.
That being said, the meaning is completely understandable; I didn't have to look at your English translation at all. Were I a Japanese artist, I would be enthused to get the letter just the way you've written it. It means more when it looks like you tried your hardest to express yourself!