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Digsy (Offline)
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02-07-2011, 03:47 PM

Thanks a lot for the feedback guys. I've changed it a little to include your suggestions:

Together:

君が       大好き。
かわいくて   やさしくて
楽しくて     すばらしくて。
それから    君だけと
いつも     一緒にいたい。
愛してるよ。

Separately:

きみがかわいくてたのしくてそれからいつも愛してるよ 。

大好き。やさしくてすばらしくて。君だけと一緒にいた い。

I added a くてto the last adjective in the list to imply there are more in this list, is this ok grammatically? Also how wrong is 一緒にほしい? Unintelligible? Because it rhymed a bit better.

Luckily I think I can write off the lack of punctuation as poetic licence. Btw Do you think its ok to use 楽しい in this context? I couldn't really think of any other good i adjectives ...
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