Thank you letter in Japanese... ^^

[Tamakyu]

My dad recently went to a sort of international conference, which he goes to every year, and at which he meets up with a Japanese man. Last year my dad was telling him about me being into Japanese stuff, so, this year, he brought presents for me and my sister, and also a magazine for me, to give to my dad at the conference. I would like to write him a thank you letter in Japanese, hopefully something like what follows:

青木さんへ
青木さんからの贈り物を父からもらいました。とても気 に入りました！
親切にしてくださり、ありがとうございます！大切に使 わせていただきます。
[私]　より

Would this be correct, grammar-wise and formality-wise?
So, this man is someone I have never met, and someone my dad has met only twice...

Thanks in advance for any help =)

[Supperman]

Hi.
I think your Japanese sentence is excellent.
You may send it to him without any change.

[masaegu]

Originally Posted by Tamakyu

My dad recently went to a sort of international conference, which he goes to every year, and at which he meets up with a Japanese man. Last year my dad was telling him about me being into Japanese stuff, so, this year, he brought presents for me and my sister, and also a magazine for me, to give to my dad at the conference. I would like to write him a thank you letter in Japanese, hopefully something like what follows:

青木さんへ
青木さんからの贈り物を父からもらいました。とても気 に入りました！
親切にしてくださり、ありがとうございます！大切に使 わせていただきます。
[私]　より

Would this be correct, grammar-wise and formality-wise?
So, this man is someone I have never met, and someone my dad has met only twice...

Thanks in advance for any help =)

「さん」 would be too casual; Use 「様（さま）」.

You cannot use 「もらいました」 because it is not your father who gave you the present. He just handed it to you. I would use 「受け取りました（うけとりました）」.

The whole last line is just marvy.

[Tamakyu]

Originally Posted by masaegu

「さん」 would be too casual; Use 「様（さま）」.

You cannot use 「もらいました」 because it is not your father who gave you the present. He just handed it to you. I would use 「受け取りました（うけとりました）」.

The whole last line is just marvy.

Ah, thank you~^^
I'm getting better at honorifics and such, but I'm still not sure of the "boundary", if you will, between -さん and -様...
So thanks for that =)

also... marvy is an epic word >u<

[masaegu]

Originally Posted by Tamakyu

Ah, thank you~^^
I'm getting better at honorifics and such, but I'm still not sure of the "boundary", if you will, between -さん and -様...
So thanks for that =)

That you have never met this person and that he must be much older than you (an assumption, though) lead me to making the change. Also I liked the last line so much that I made the change to go better with it.

also... marvy is an epic word >u<

You won't hear that said by Japanese guys too often.

[Tamakyu]

Originally Posted by masaegu

That you have never met this person and that he must be much older than you (an assumption, though) lead me to making the change. Also I liked the last line so much that I made the change to go better with it.

A correct assumption >u<
Well anyways, thanks for your help! =)

You won't hear that said by Japanese guys too often.

you don't say? XD

[masaegu]

Originally Posted by Tamakyu

you don't say? XD

Well, you are just not gonna hear too many other Tokyoites utter words like "marvy", "chippy", "laddie", etc.

Anyway, we shouldn't be talking in English when your Japanese is so good. Did you stay in Tama before or something?

[Tamakyu]

Originally Posted by masaegu

Anyway, we shouldn't be talking in English when your Japanese is so good. Did you stay in Tama before or something?

No, no! My Japanese really isn't that good; that's just been worked on a lot^^'