One Complex Sentence... Help!

[sederien]

Hello everyone,

I'm currently translating my resume and, as the title suggests, I'm having a bit of trouble translating a complex sentence.

Here's the Objective:

Diligent, motivated High Honors graduate seeking an economic research or business analyst position where strong quantitative and qualitative skills will add to the bottom line. Special interest in projects related to Japan.

Now some of the nouns are easy. I've already got (in order):

経済学者 - Economist
ビジネス分析者 - Business Analyst OR ビジネスコンサルタント - Business Consultant
定量分析 - Quantative Analysis
定性分析 - Qualitative Analysis

Yet the "Diligent, motivated High Honors graduate" part and "add to the bottom line"... I have no clue where to begin.

The end of the first sentence should probably be:

を探しています。 - am searching for.

or I might want it to read:

になりたいです。 - would like to become.

Though I'm wondering if there's a more formal way of writing this. (I'm not very good at written Japanese... I can only speak it to a degree.)

I'd appreciate any and all help! Thanks for your time.

[sederien]

I'm not one to normally double-post, but I'm using this thread as a worksheet as well...

It seems that it would be best to split the sentence up grammatically first.

Thus:

"Diligent, motivated High Honors graduate" is our main subject to be followed by は.

(I might use 働き者 - Hard Worker here, but I have no cultural reference for if it's appropriate to refer to yourself as a "hard worker" as a promotional.)

"seeking" is our verb so the sentence will end with を探しています。 or proper variation thereof.

"an economic research or business analyst position" should precede を.

And it might be easiest to stop there and save the last part for a separate sentence.

So...

Diligent, motivated High Honors graduate は ビジネス分析者 か　経済学者の　仕事　を探しています。

[Debezo]

my humble suggestion,

business analyst - ビジネス分析者(業務分析者) is hardly used. In exchange, ビジネスアナリスト is used frequently.
Diligent - 勤勉な(働き者 is so colloquial)
motivated - 熱心な、やる気のある
High - 上位
Honors - 優等、優等学位
graduate - 卒業生

where strong quantitative and qualitative skills will add to the bottom line.
skill - 技術、技能、知識(knowledge)
the bottom line - Is that for a economics term? in that case, it might be 収支決算 or 純益 etc.
私の定量分析と定性分析の知識は、will add to the bottom line.
or
私の定量分析と定性分析の知識は、貴社（の業績）に 貢献できると考えています。

Special interest in projects related to Japan.
- 特に日本に関係のあるプロジェクト（or 事業）に興味を持っています。

[XjhonnyX]

i have no idea!!!

[sederien]

Originally Posted by Debezo

my humble suggestion,

business analyst - ビジネス分析者(業務分析者) is hardly used. In exchange, ビジネスアナリスト is used frequently.

Diligent - 勤勉な(働き者 is so colloquial)

Thank you! I'm still not at the point where I realize what is and isn't colloquial Japanese.

motivated - 熱心な、やる気のある
High - 上位
Honors - 優等、優等学位
graduate - 卒業生

That would make the noun phrase:

"勤勉で熱心な優等卒業生は"

(I dropped "上位 - High" because, even though I could grammatically add it, I realized I couldn't find a similar phrase anywhere. Thus, I'd rather be an Honors graduate than a "High" Honors graduate who's making up words. ^^)

where strong quantitative and qualitative skills will add to the bottom line.
skill - 技術、技能、知識(knowledge)
the bottom line - Is that for a economics term? in that case, it might be 収支決算 or 純益 etc.

Corporate term. Means "Net Income" in most cases and is defined as a corporations profit after all taxes have been applied. Therefore, I think 純益 is best here.

私の定量分析と定性分析の知識は、will add to the bottom line.
or
私の定量分析と定性分析の知識は、貴社（の業績）に 貢献できると考えています。

I like your phrasing here better and it still translates to much the same meaning. Company achievements are just as good.

Special interest in projects related to Japan.
- 特に日本に関係のあるプロジェクト（or 事業）に興味を持っています。

Ok...

That's everything. Thank you again Debezo!

I really appreciate the help.

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Originally Posted by XjhonnyX

i have no idea!!!

Heh... It was complex. No worries. If you're studying the language, you'll get there. ^^

[sederien]

Final translation:

Diligent, motivated High Honors graduate seeking an economic research or business analyst position where strong quantitative and qualitative skills will add to the bottom line. Special interest in projects related to Japan.

勤勉で熱心な優等卒業生はビジネスアナリストか経済学 者の仕事を探しています。私の定量分析と定性分析の知 識は貴社の業績に貢献できると考えています。特に日本 に関係のあるプロジェクトに興味を持っています。

[Debezo]

hmm... I think...
I think that you had better put 私は at the beginning of your first sentence. your first sentence may sounds like "someone who ~ graduate seeking ~". and you may put watashiha at only the beginning of the paragraph. you don't need repeat watashiha in each sentences unless the topic changes.
e.g.
私は～な卒業生で、～の仕事を探しています。
or
私は～な学生で、優秀な成績で大学を卒業し、～の仕事 を探しています。
hmm, my examples are not so good.