Anyone want to show off song-writing or poetry?
 

What do you think of this?


So Give Me a Black Rose

はるみ すみこ

You hurt me so badly
I'll never forget
I wondered what happened
I think I will never know
You sing me your sweet song
And drag me away
Sneak into the darkness
To where you left me
So give me a black rose
The symbol of death
Wish I was never here
Because I no longer care
My heart has been shattered
You left it that way
Wounded and torn apart
As if there was
No other answer
I know what a friend is
It's no longer you
I miss when I liked how
Your kindness was with me
But I do not
Want it anymore
If ever you want me
I reject your request
You say to me why you
Were not there when
I needed you the most
And maybe I forgive you
But most likely not
For I do not want your
Deception and lies


I will add more to it later

No one? Can someone else at least read it? No one even wants to say anything irrelevant?

thats so coool!! ur good:D im never did something like that but im sur i'd suck ^_^;

thats really good...i wrote a song similar to that...maybe i'll post it
i call it tears of blood...

Tears of blood
The tears of blood roll down my cheek.
You ripped my heart out of my chest
could you have just left it there?
Why did you have to tear it out?

the drops of blood fall down my chest.
my heart in your hand you ripped it to peices
why don't you shred it up
cant you just throw it away

that hole in my chest
cant you just allow me to bleed to death?
please just leave me here to die but
dont rip my heart to shreds.

the drops of blood fall down my chest.
my heart in your hand
you ripped it to peices why don't you shred it up
cant you just throw it away

the blood falls from my chest
just let me die
lay me in the ground bury my heart with me
the tears stream down my cheek
my heart is on the ground

the drops of blood fall from my chest
my heart was in your hand
why did you shred it up
did you have to throw it away

please give me your heart
allow me to mend this hole
give me your heart i need it so
please dont leave
i dont want to be alone.


tell me what you think :)

Wow... I like that.

I'm new here, I think your poetry is awesome!

WOW! I think some of our best creativity comes from our pain.

Here are a couple of mine:

I saw Your Face

I saw your face
again.
Just a glance at
a photo of you,
And my heart
ached,
so hard and fast.
I had to catch my breath
and look away.
Before tears came.
______________________________

I Saw Red



I saw red once,
in a beautiful
sunset.
In an early morning
sunrise.
in the beautiful
Autumn trees.
I saw red once,
in the color of
a beautiful
woman's hair.
She told me
she loved me,
once.
I will always remember
in my heart,
how beautiful.

by Mitcheru Lee

those are good...i love the first one

i agree with you...i wrote that after the guy i liked got a gf and decided to treat me like crap...
that was a few days ago

thanks

i had my heart ripped out and that inspired me

Thanks.:ywave:

any time :] im not very creative that just popped into my head one day:D

Here's another one:

Being Invisible



I stand
in a room
You wave
I wave back
you run to greet
someone behind me
I'm invisible

I start to talk to you
You look through my skull
at someone across the room
I'm invisible

I'm invisible
Why don't you see me?
Why can't you hear me?
I guess you want me
Invisible.

holy crap! thats good :}
i think that describes me and the guy i liked...

Thanks- Story of my life lol!
I write alot of these down just kinda flows out.

this isnt to much of poetry
but here

carbon monoxide

silently killing you-
get into you with little warning
and as it leaves you slowly die

i didnt want to love you
but then i did
i tried my hardest to get you to return it
but nothing worked
when i found out that it was all just a dream
you were like carbon monoxide
you entered my life and
with those simple words you were gone

you will never know how much i felt for you
nor will you ever know
why out of everyone
you were wrapped around my heart

just like carbon monoxide
you entered with out notice
and left me here to die

same with me...i just try to not relive them so i dont write em down
usually they are depressing

WOW! I like you 'Carbon Monoxide' poem!
Yeah, alot of mine are from the pain of ending a relationship or remembering...

Chains



Chains pull me
down
drag me low
to the ground
My face in mud
I hear laughing
looking down at
me

Each time I try
to get back up,
the chains
pull tighter still

Back into the
cold slime
I cannot breathe
I feel heels
stabbing,
pushing on my
back
Down boy,
stay down, boy
Good boy.

Chains are pulling me
down.

by Mitcheru Lee

thankss :] thats also about him...im having some real issues with him...
and thats a good poem too

That's a great way to vent those feelings. I use Live Journal to write them on there. Time passes, like the seasons and Spring comes after the long bitter winter.

i usually dont write them on here but i think i have a few on myspace...*goes to look*
i'll post em if i find them

Great ! Put them here too for others to see!

i built up a wall around my heart
and you came and took it apart
you slowly got in
theres a mark where you've been
why did you leave it there?
didn't you know i cant bear?
i thought i could let you go
but like a bow
you were wrapped around my heart
then you tore it apart
so please just go
and dont let me know
i love you now
even if i dont know how
im tryin to let you go

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hopefully u can get to that

i have a long one called "she told you once" thats great and i cant copy & paste it

Very nice!

Amazing! All of you! Thank you for replying.

Thank you for sharing first!

Yeah. You're welcome. I was wondering when someone would reply. I'm so happy now, despite being depressed! It's the weirdest thing!
:pandahurray::confused: :pinkcry:

Yeah, I know how you feel- I find it hard myself to be noticed- like I'm just backgound noise.

Strangely, I am the same way. I have no idea if people hear me when I repeat information and then they reprimand me for still talking.

Exactly how it is!!
Just like my "I'm Invisible" poem!

One of my band;s songs
 

I'm posting one of my band;s new songs...a snippet of D'NR:

"The girl with the rotted body roams at night,
wondering what is becoming to her former life, lover and sentence,
she moans aloud, the chains of hell are holding her down....
she screams real loud, hoping that they will arouse, her lover, her lost lover, a lonely soul.
[but] deep down inside, she knows her voice can't be heard and will not hide, the tragedies that she has seen as a departed bride..........

The boy, hears a wailing, haunting wailing sound in the night,
telling of revenge, to avenge, her murder all those nights.....ago,
Not that long ago, when she was there everyday, he sworn her love and life away, kept from each other, kept out of reach....
Not knowing that one knew of the other's life, was waiting faithfully, and idly by,
but separated by the dark and emotionless sea.........

"I'll always remain in your heart....." those words he spoke before her untimely demise....
not a surprise, he remains in the pools of her eyes........."

Info: Name: Systeimatik D/sfuxtin Of The Corrupted
Written By: Bloody
Date Written: Mar. 11, 2008 10:52 pm
Music: D'NR

That's great!!! What kind of music do you play? Metal or Screamo?

It really is - beyond words I know. I hate it with all my free will (that isn't hating the person who hurt me so deeply that I can't think about him without feeling great pain).

MitcheruOtaku, you seem like a fine person to me... why do other people act this way? Am I crazy or has the whole world lost its mind?

your not crazy! im the same way...i just disappeared for the whole day yesterday and not a soul cared except for the two i was with.

Sorry I was delayed-

People for the most part have become very self centered, they want to be in the spotlight, we have alot of good things we can add, yet they feel the need
to be in the center. You know what? Let them, for we are the better people. They are people without any real depth. We can know that we are the special ones that care, and are sensative people, The light ones, the kind who can change the world! You can smile inside knowing this when you are in a group like this- better yet, be still, look and listen to those who are like you and me, and when you find those of us -those are the few the precious people that will lift you up and not bring you down.
Inusan- There are those who do care that you may not even realize.
Always be careful to take care of yourself. I've found over the years that
be true to yourself, believe in yourself, each of us is made special and has importance in this world. We are each like a thread that binds everyone together like a beautiful tapastry. I wish the world would understand this. They unravel so much and there are rips in the cloth because of wars, greed,
hatred, and we need to mend those by becoming strong good (thread)people.
Belive.
Mitcheru

wow
powerfull :] people suck though...they just dont understand us...or the people that they choose to make fun of and put down but one day they will be under our thumbs and they will be sorry:D

Here's a song I wrote today. I don't have the chorus for it because I left it in my locker at school but I do have the verses.

Red Sunset

Warped Reality
Affliction of tears
Tweaked Shadows
Making monsters under my bed
Sickly hearts
Dead wilted flowers
Creatures followed me here
And the door has closed on the...
Red Sunset

**chorus**

Windmills burned
Visions unseen
Chaos wreaking
In and out of dreams
Cathedrals fall
Walls closing in
Shattered glass
Make my fingers bleed like a...
Red Sunset

**chorus**

Dying Laughter
Splinters deepen
Raw emotion
What constrain
Nightmares playing
Comfort the dark
Blinding sunshine
Keeps burning my skin, where is my...
Red Sunset

**chorus**

I will update it when I have the chorus ^^