Gal, that mus really hv been harsh.. no wonder that poem was beautiful

Little ones cry
little ones
are here alone
we just
leave them to go
to be
to try
we all will die
for our wold
tears us apart
i am alone
with no one to hold
to grasp out
into the air
the thinning cold
will soon hold
what is left of me
a lie here
a lie there
does it really matter
with nothing to loose
i will ooze
out all of my pain
we are suffering
little by little
hoping i will feel better
but my pain
isnt going down
the drain
instead it covers
up all my lust
for a new life
of laughter and trust
to be alone
or to be shone
out to this little
meek world
children cry
and i try
to strain
to hear your words
of wisdom
for they are true
and you will always
be there

Life isnt worth living without love
you took me away
my love every day
i put all my trust
into something that
wasnt really us
i wanted to be
a big family
but then i saw you
with that other thing
the one you loved
breaking my heart
that is what tore us apart
from living life to the fullest
now i am sinking
like i have no more life
plumming down wards
towands something with more lust
but i still have something
that you cn never have
a life without living for
i have gone
to another place
where i am here one moment
and gone the next
with a noose aroung my neck
i get ready to fall
when you came into the room
with a look that said it all
i am gone now
you crying at my bloody feet
time has no meaning
since i am not here at all

omg! wow, I really really really like those! they are incredibly great, and i can totally feel what you were writting...I give you a thumbs up for both! Please, feel free to post more!

but here is a happy one from me...

Perfect

The smile that stops me
Dead in my tracks
The kiss that revives me
That brings me back

The embrace that comforts me
The days that I cry
The arms that find me
When I’m lost in his eyes

The words that speak to me
The thoughts so kind
The touch that gives me
A new state of mind

The skin that warms me
Makes me love-sick
The breath that mingles
That tells me he’s perfect


that has to be one of my favorites....tell me what you think...

Wow.... You and Yuri rock. I would write poems, but the inspiration always comes when I don't have a pen.... Those are beautiful....

I just thought I'd take my sig and make it into what it originally was supposed to be...

There is an endless rain of negativity.
Streams of hatred run through our veins as we're drenched in regret.
Teetering on the edge of despair, we fall back into the security of madness, leaving no space for the clouds to part and the rays of happiness to sink in.
Death is just a coward's way out.

And so, we flutter into the relams of consciousness.
Our nightmares are plagued with demons jealous of the life we possess, and will claim it using any method possible.
But, when we awake, the nightmares seem more like dreams, as everyone around is just a soulless entity,
in a torn down city where people cling to the rubble of a happy life which was ripped apart years before our own existence.
The debris of success lay scattered, with all wanting and few attaining.
They're after you - just another rival.
Don't put up a fight, they'll eat you alive.
Don't fall, nobody will catch you.

Note that all poems are different. Mine has 2 stanzas and no rhyme, only thought provoking materials hopefully.

I enjoyed that very much! It is nice to get a variety of styles and I think you have a great imagination. Keep up thee good work!

Maku.....That was amazing! I really really like that one, too! Thats so full of thought. I really like it. I love reading poems that make me think or feel....that one definatly made me feel. You should know that that is a real compliment. Like when I wrote my story Stars and it made people cry, I felt really great knowing that my work had really touched someone. So, I figured I'd let you know that I felt really touched from what you wrote.....you and Yuri most definately have to keep posting in here...

As for your lovely compliments, Rikku777, I'm very glad you like our work...It really means alot that people read and appriciate it!

and since I'm bored, I think I will finally post Hate's Immortal

Hate's Immortal

I am the immortal
I cannot die
I'll walk this earth forever
I'll do nothing but cry

I've made people fall
I've watched people break
I've seen horrible disasters
I've felt the earth shake

Heaven's gates won't open
Hell won't let me in
I want to cheat my life
Though it is a sin

All humans must die
Their bodies left emty
Like a huge scar
Leaving only a memory

I've been to wars
Darkness takes the sky
And upon the ground
I see people die

I want go away
Die just like them
I want to be a memory
My soul a precious gem

I dislike this world
My life's not worth living
It's all about hate
Peace no one is giving

I've seen it all
More bad than good
Stop all the hate
This world should

I am the immortal
And I want to die
Because this world is full of hate
I do nothing but cry


**This poem inspired by the graphic novel Immortal Rain**

Seriously, tears came to my eyes. I think I like this one the best so far. If you published your poems, you would be doing the world a favor.

I really liked it....it' so... I don't know who to explain it.