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So I just made two mistakes then? XD~! Whew.. not bad for a first-timer eh? That was better than I expected =P
Thanks for the pointers, Aoshi-kun! I'd love to read your works of poetry too :D |
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P.S:- They weren't mistakes... A mistake is when you do it wrong. This was just a case when it could be even better! :vsign: |
Right, thanks :vsign:
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It could never measure up to your standards, Insane-sama XD but thanks either way :D
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me and nard decided to both make a poem based on the same themes..and this was what we came up with..
nard's: Still got many words I haven't said to you Still got a lot of gifts which I haven't given Parting ways is always so sudden Sometimes without even a clue Why it happened Even before I revealed everything How much tears you must have shed alone A fool I am for not knowing My self-ignorant acts I simply cannot condone Only you, when I'm not talking Know what my hearts wants to say just by looking in my eyes Only you who hears my blessings Know fully well this is not the reason my heart cries Afraid of letting you discover that to make you stay is my plan Forgetting my passionate pleas Love and lies go hand in hand Indulging in ridiculous fantasies Remember you said that when I'm by your side Anywhere on Earth is heaven Smiling brightly like a child without pride You lighted up my grey and dim den Only you, when I'm not speaking Know what my hearts wants to declare by observing my trends Only you who hears me wishing Know fully well this is not what my heart intends Please don't go, living is impossible without you My whole life revolves around your existence You will forever be my one and true Although in front of you I may appear clumsy The sole reason is because of my failure to behold The dazzling miracle that is you and mine: when the day loses it's light and the emptiness turns cold like an eagle in full flight you leave me with no-one to hold not a whisper was spoken not a single tear fell like a falling vase - it's broken this enchantent over - a useless spell how could these have eluded me how could i possibly oversaw the tempest in the calmest seas and the thief at the door i want so much to make you stay yet i know not how perhaps this is the price i must pay but all i know is i need you now i remeber that in my arms you spoke that heaven was enveloped within upon those words now i choke and pray forgiveness for my sin i realize now that you are my sun that that very heaven was you without which my world seems dun veiled in darkness and lost in the blue somehow you seem to know what i'm saying just by looking me in the eye you know full well just what i'm praying so is this how we say goodbye all my life i'm wondered if miracles were true and i wonder why i've never been shown but now i understand, for now i've known that the most beautiful miracle, was you well..if you've read it you'll see that what's in mine is basically the ideas from his, and tt's because he made me make a poem based on his..-.- o well..happy happy joy joy..lalalalala..oro *.* |
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