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Yuri · (#41 (**permalink**))

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Originally Posted by lpdirufangirl09

Courage______________________
she stands on the shore
watching the rise and the fall of the tide
alone and wearing her heart on her sleeve

the white tips of the wave reminds her
of the sparkle in his eyes
and the sunset is his smile
it makes her heart beat
the sand between her thin fingers
it is the way their hands interlaced
like the last time they said goodbye

she's walking towards the water
and the pain hurts a little more
she says, "it's so stupid", what she's doing this for

a sigh is released as she walks closer
the water is at her knees
she takes a leap of courage
and lets herself go

her body is screaming for help
her heart is saying "no,"
the air from her lungs has vanished
and it's starting to show

he stands on the shore
watching the rise and the fall of the tide
he regrets what he said to her
and wishes he had the courage to apologize

wow...as a fellow poem writter im envious

lpdirufangirl09 · (#42 (**permalink**))

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Originally Posted by Yuri

wow...as a fellow poem writter im envious

Thanks. =]
This is my favorite thing i've ever written. I wrote it about 2 years ago.

Yuna7780 · (#43 (**permalink**))

I really liked your "my LOVE" poem. Is it okay I should it to my English teacher, as for we are going over poetry in my class? I think it's very pretty.

lpdirufangirl09 · (#44 (**permalink**))

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Originally Posted by Yuna7780

I really liked your "my LOVE" poem. Is it okay I should it to my English teacher, as for we are going over poetry in my class? I think it's very pretty.

Sure! As long as i get credit of course. =]

AoshiShinomori · (#45 (**permalink**))

I'm kind of curious about the rhyme scheme and meter in the courage poem. They seem to be a bit dispersed. It adds effect to the poem

Do you usually attempt rhyme schemes or do you prefer free verse?

lpdirufangirl09 · (#46 (**permalink**))

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Originally Posted by AoshiShinomori

I'm kind of curious about the rhyme scheme and meter in the courage poem. They seem to be a bit dispersed. It adds effect to the poem

Do you usually attempt rhyme schemes or do you prefer free verse?

I just do whatever flows. I don't usually plan how a poem will be. It kinda just comes to me.

Yuna7780 · (#47 (**permalink**))

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Sure! As long as i get credit of course. =]

Well, it'd be a crime to do that. Anyway, my teacher knows I can't write poetry for shit nor like writing it, so there'd be no way to get around saying it's my work.

lpdirufangirl09 · (#48 (**permalink**))

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Well, it'd be a crime to do that. Anyway, my teacher knows I can't write poetry for shit nor like writing it, so there'd be no way to get around saying it's my work.

haha. okay then.