my poetry. check it out.
 

well, i began posting my poetry on another thread but i decided to make my own.




my LOVE_________________________
Walk up behind me
Put your hands around my waist
Kiss me on my cheek
And put a smile upon my face
Whisper in my ear
And say three simple words
Tell me that youre mine
And how you think my insecurities are absurd
Bring over your guitar
And sing to me when Im ill
Kiss me in the cold, pouring rain
And watch time stand still
Wipe away my tears
And pick me up when I fall
Make me a promise
To be there when I call
Be my only one,
My very best friend
And lets ride into the sunset
Until the very end

Everytime You Lie_____________________________
Smash your fist into the wall
now I think we've been thought it all
it's midnight and I'm crying again
we've had this fight too many times
over what's wrong and who's right
and everytime, it tears me down

you never had to make excuses
you didn't have to lie
all you had to say is, baby, this is goodbye
but you know

I could never let you go
no matter how many times I cry
I fall deeper and deeper in love with you
everytime you lie
I should really hate you right now
but it wouldn't feel right
I only want to be with you more
everytime you lie

it's been four months and I'm over you
for the first time I feel so free
and I can do what I want to do
but then you come back around
and you look into my eyes
you bring me back to those memories
and I realize

I could never let you go
no matter how many times I cry
I fall deeper and deeper in love with you
everytime you lie
I should really hate you right now
but it wouldn't feel right
I only want to be with you more
everytime you lie

Pieces (How Far We Fall)______________________
I hate to leave this world
but baby right now I feel six feet under
its sunshine outside
but all I can hear is thunder
you came into this room
broken and you have spoken
of a dream that was torn in two

pieces
I wanna put you back together
but i can't, you won't give me the
pieces
baby I guess they'll just weather and you're in
pieces
from a smile to nothing at all
maybe we should be careful
of how far we fall

Don't...___________________
Let's not lie, sweetheart..
I know you know I'd love to die in your arms
But I never seem to make it there
Before I get shot down
And I'm back on the ground where I started

Don't say you will if you won't
Don't keep going when I say no
And don't lie to me when I tell you I love you
don't walk when you say you're gonna run
don't say stop if it's not even begun
and when I ask you to stay…
baby, don't walk away.

Love You___________________
(March 22, 2007)

you're so indecisive
and unwelcome
i wish you could see
what you have become
so delusional
and a wishful thinker
i just wish you could be
a promise keeper

love you..
love us..
love everything we were..
there's nothing left between us..

love her..
love yourself..
love all of the promises,
we all know you're gonna break..

love love..
love everything i said..
love "always, til death"..




notes: in this, i was inspired by the song 'love you' by jack ingram. if you've ever heard it, then you know that all the 'love's [only 1st in line 17] is substituted for another four letter word. o.o

How Does It Feel?____________________
(March 19, 2007)

How does it feel to know,
I would have once died for you,
and my whole world revolved around you?
how does it feel
to have all these girls at your feet?
how does it feel when you're loving her
as I watch from a distance and weep?

or can you even feel it at all?
I hope you do…
so you can feel the hell you've put me through
do you feel it
when my heart skips a beat for another
and when you know the smile on my face
it wasn't meant for you?
Do you know how it feels
when your hopes and your prayers
and your wishes and your dreams,
it all falls through?

Never Mine________________________
(September 30, 2006)

"I'm not afraid of jumping off a 30 story building
I'm not afraid to die
I'm not afraid to walk across fire
And I'm not afraid to cry
There's nothing I'm afraid of
And you know it's true
But, baby, i know
I'm so afraid of losing you"

That's what i said so long ago
Now it's like you're someone i don't know
I'm over you but the memories remain
I wish you could walk with me as i walk through the rain
At the same time, i wish i could just forget the hurt
I've lost you and I'm not scared
When you said goodbye, i didn't really care
I've no more to say except that i had a good time
I'll have one better without you
Now that i think about it, you were never really mine.

Lost________________________________
(December 30, 2006)

Where am I?
Why am I here?
Why does my vision seem so unclear?
Who brought me here?
I wonder quietly to myself
It feels like a cold, dark hell

There's water on this ground
The sky is gray all around
I'm losing my strength to breathe
Footsteps sound near
I'm overcome by fear
I look up to find you

Your face is pale
And your eyes are blank
As I silently wait for you to explain
You bend down on your weak knees
And your cold hands touch my face
I anxiously question, "What is this place?"

You tell me "it's okay,
Soon you'll be in a better place,
Your wish to leave this city
Will be granted without leaving a trace"
This is not how I wanted to leave
Where are you taking me?

Put me down
Let me go
I want to stay
The end was never meant to be this way
One last breath…
-sayonara-

How I Feel__________________
(February 2, 2007)

For the last time
I swear, if you only knew
What I feel inside
Maybe everything would be alright
I should hate you
And want to break you
But I can't help but fall deeper
Everytime you break me

It sounds stupid
And crazy
And if I said I hate you
Could you blame me?

Reading reminders
of the days gone past
3 and a half years
have gone so fast
I want you and no one else
call me insane
but that's just how I feel

Fantasy vs. Reality_______________
(November 2, 2006)

In my fantasy world,
It was forever.
It was meant to be
And we would never let go

But in reality,
It was hell.
And like a white line on black paper,
It showed.

Only in my dreams,
That lie would last.
And you'd be the future,
We wouldn't look back at the past.

When I look at it today,
You only brought me down.
You were never mine,
I'm so happy I'm without you now.

And everyday I ask myself,
"why didn't I do this sooner?"

I Like'em!
Good Work!

oh wow, those are some amazing poems! i really liked "My Love" the best! very good work!

ow, I really like them. Do you mind if I use "Lost" in my doujinshi??
It fits perfectly where Reita dies *--*

Would you mind if I posted one?

Is poet still that long these days????
Cuz people prefer short poets.

sometimes i have a lot to get out.

Love the poetry and I feel the pain of your heart, but no man is worth it, move on as you deserve better :vsign:

I did not liked most of them because they are about love and that's a empty subject.But I liked "Pieces" and "Fantasy vs Reality"!

Well you could try using the things around you for inspiration,and interpret them in your particular way.

add a bit of irony and sarcasm to make them fun to read, though do not exaggerate to keep the seriousness...

Umm.... you could also so use a complex rhyme scheme... such as a certain amount of syllables per line, with each line rhyming!. All poems don't have to rhyme, but the ones that rhyme are more memorable! Take this one I wrote for an example!...

The lies, the truth.
Deceit, the proof.
Deceived by you.
Stolen, my youth.
Was I the fool,
For loving you?
What should I do?
Abandon you?
Try to pull through?
Shed tears for you?
I thought you knew
That I loved you.
I feel so used.
Also confused.
My heart's imbued
A crimson hue.
I must renew.
I must pursue
For the debut
of me, post-you!

aww its beautiful love.. i havent finished them .. no... but i will!

it happens

and btw


reita NEVER dies

wow i really like what you wrote.

and maybe i got an idea

how about you try writing some songs or something.
cause they are poems just with a different set up
maybe you'll get inspired or something. idk just an idea

maybe ill post some of my songs up on here.

heya no aka_______________________
here, take a sip.
sit and talk a while.
as our laughter lingers
across your drunken smile.
you're mine now.

i'll take your hand in mine
and look into your eyes.
build up a little trust.
tell a few white lies.
you're mine now.

press your lips against mine.
let's see whats up these stairs.
use this bandana to hide your eyes.
there's a surprise up here
you're mine now.

several moments pass.
you're lying on the floor.
gasping to catch your breath.
i'm glad a locked the door.
you're mine now.

do you like how i painted the room?
it's my favorite color, red.
i think it just screams 'you'.
too bad you're dead.
you're mine now.

i get to keep you forever.
a pretty memory in my head.
i see you everywhere.
you surround me as i lie in bed.
you're mine now.

we are worlds apart.
perfect strangers to each.
i feel something from you.
but you're too far to reach.
as you walk beneath the moon,
my sun is beaming, bright as can be.
i see you when i dream.
do you ever think of me?

eternity_________________
the stars that shine
bright in the sky
will, in due time,
fall and be gone
taking their place
is another
knowing it's fate
but there is one
one lonely star
that remains there
a sign of hope
it will not fade
eternity
shine in midair

your tires squeal against the pavement..
saying, "goodbye,
i just can't love you anymore."
with an apathetic attitude
i'm thinking 'what a mistake..'
but who cares?
i don't need you anyways.
that dress you bought for me
looks good on my best friend.
the ring you wouldn't take back,
wonder how much money i could get.
and thanks for supporting my pyromania,
our pictures give me something to burn.
you'll come crawling back to me
i'll laugh when you say your lesson's learned.

Nice poems. I can see you put a lot of feeling into them.

I appreciated much the last one!:)

OMG! WOW! You sure do write a lot of poetry. Ever tried rhyme schemes or do you always write free verse? :confused:

i've tried rhyming but it's a little harder to get my point across then. lol

any scheme ideas?

I'm mostly for the seven syllable a b a b. That's tougher than the a b c b scheme but it gives more poetic grace. Seven syllable is easier to write than eight.

You're right though, free verse is best suited for deep emotions. Somehow though after a while it just seems to me like bent prose when I write it. I'd much rather fancy a well written essay at times. I've always been pro-rhyme scheme from the start. The challenge just eggs me on to write it better ^_^.

Keep those great poems coming IDF! :vsign:

Courage______________________
she stands on the shore
watching the rise and the fall of the tide
alone and wearing her heart on her sleeve

the white tips of the wave reminds her
of the sparkle in his eyes
and the sunset is his smile
it makes her heart beat
the sand between her thin fingers
it is the way their hands interlaced
like the last time they said goodbye

she's walking towards the water
and the pain hurts a little more
she says, "it's so stupid", what she's doing this for

a sigh is released as she walks closer
the water is at her knees
she takes a leap of courage
and lets herself go

her body is screaming for help
her heart is saying "no,"
the air from her lungs has vanished
and it's starting to show

he stands on the shore
watching the rise and the fall of the tide
he regrets what he said to her
and wishes he had the courage to apologize

Our Salty Moon_________
Let's sit beside the sea.
No one else,
Just you and me.
Let's dig our bare feet
Into the taupe sand.
Let's let the waves crash onto us
As we sit together, hand in hand.
Let's forget the world.
Tonight, all we need is each other.
Your chest is my pillow,
The midnight sky is my cover.

Winter Love_________________
A snow covered forest stands still
Two pairs of footprints make a secret trail
The ground crunches below us
Colossal trees become so very frail
Hand in hand together
All but our hearts are cold
A touch like a heat wave in winter
No feelings are left untold
The last two people on earth
Or so we seem to be
My eyes carefully focused on you
And yours steadily on me