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wow i havent ben posted in a while
i just made another poem/song (it has a chorus) I can feel you all around me even tho your gone. I can feel your arms around me even tho their not I can hear your heart beating even tho its ceased i can feel you all around me holding me close. I love you and miss you and I wish you were here I can still feel you beside me even tho your not here I miss you, I love you Dont leave me my dear, Live on in my memory Live on in me, my dear. I can feel you within me Growing inside me Holding on to me I you holding me waiting for me to notice you I do, my dear, I do I wish you were here I love you and I miss you and I wish you were here I can feel you still beside me even tho your not here I miss you, I love you Dont leave me my dear, Live on in my memory Live on in me, my dear. Live on Live on Even tho your not here I beg you live on Don't be forgotten Stay here my dear Live on, within me darling Live on my dear. |
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The Father He was great and funny, He was good and friendly, He didn't even own a gun. His homiez all warned him, He would have to carry one, But he never listened. Now he can't even laugh nor cry. Because all the worst had happened. His Homeboyz are in regret, His homegirlz all n tears. They wore his favorite color On their beautiful woven crosses. His girlfriend's in the hospital His mother by her side. The newborn in the nursery, With the father's given name. Her mother's all in tears, Trying not to think That the father of her grandson, Won't even be around. The nurses try to calm him, But the newborn already knows That he just missed his father's love, And all that would have been. |
aww thats so sad
it seriously made me cry ill edit my poem in latter here is my poem I feel the bite on my skin as the blade pierces the flesh I see the trail of red as it leaves the flesh I see the flow, I smile an easy smile I can feel Finally I can feel It is not the feeling I want tho It is pain I do not want pain I want love I want happiness Is love possible? Is happiness attainable? No. Only pain Only suffering I watch the blood as it leaves my veins. I lick the lovely wound and the taste brings a bitterness into my mouth. Bitterness A feeling I suck the blood from the wound. The bleeding, it stops The crimson red… it has left I look in the mirror I see a stranger I see crimson red upon the lips And I see eyes, empty and dead. I a face empty and shallow. The ugly face stares back at me... I take the razor and slash again, and again. And, again, I drink. |
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i hate it... it reminds me of the old days of when i DID do that... its sick.... i rote it when i did do that... its sick |
Yeah your right....but it brings a whole new perspective. As to how you might of felt at that moment. Wow great use of words too.
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Running Away I call out, but all I seem to see is the back of your head, like I'm not even worth taking a look behind you to notice. An ocean between us, a web cascading over the gap, catching me at every turn, I can hardly hide what I feel. What happened to me? Was it when I took a step forward, when my feelings had gone and I had taken my chances, only the poison has returned, and maybe you can feel it too? I can no longer hide from what is to happen. So I will not hide, I will run from you. I notice no change in your stride, no flautering in your epression, as i step away slowly, as if you never cared, as you probably never did. And so i run away, and even if it is only i who notices the ocean, the web cascading over the distance I am making, even if you do not know how I feel and how I am running, then maybe it is only i who feels this rift. A slow song that no one will dance to, as it plays itself out within my mind, a sad song that mourns my ignorance of my own emotions, I feel it, that you never knew, that you never cared, and who am I to say you should have? I play myself out to be a funny, sarcastic boy as to distance myself, to convince us we are friends when really we are not. But on the inside I feel nothing similar to friendship. I feel sad, I feel lonely, because you could never like me. And so i run. I've just recently realized how much it bugs me to be away from the girl I like, even though I've always been sure she didn't like me. So I've decided to stop being her friend; We were never too close, I'm sure she won't miss it. And this way, i won't keep chasing after a prize i can't have. |
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How I see the way you use your words makes your poetry powerful.
And besides our own selves will always view our poems not good enough. ^_^ Keep writing poems, Onexsoul. I want to read more of your poems. |
Forever bleeding
In a pool of blood You laugh at me and say “It’s only just begun” Like a poison You run through my veins Unseen through the flow You are killing me You wait for my deadly reaction As you make your connection Right through my heart Now its torn apart You wait until it Slowly stops to beat Wait for my last breath Wait for me to start to break Now as my lifeless eyes Stare back at you You laugh at me and say “It’s only just begun” |
What Went Wrong As I walk to the park, I catch myself, talking - to no one. I feel pretty sad, that I won't be able - to speak to you, anymore. I've always wondered, "What went wrong" But I could never, get an answer, to my question. I always thought, it was going great for us I went ahead, I didn't believe my friends. You kept on lying to me, saying it wasn't true. Until I, my very own eyes, saw you hand in hand. You weren't walking in the rain but you were certainly, holding hands with her. |
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That's too dark.But it is cool that way.:vsign: |
Lol thats one I sent you.
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subject : If non-living things could talk. what would they say.
Why do you hurt me? I try to be nice, and I try not to waste, when we're here or there. It feels great, when you take me to those shows. And it feels even more greater, when I win a trophy, for me and especially for you. When I first started winning, you took care of me, like an everlasting toy. Because I was always there for you. Colors of fixing everywhere, and cruisings at 10 M.P.H. Watching you whistle, at them other girls, made me kinda jealous. But I knew you loved me, because I loved you too. But ever since she came along you've stopped the care of me, Like though, I had never existed before. lowrider cars. |
To be born again for your sake, Blowing the past away on fluttering clouds; Letting the future ride on flowing winds; Fearlessly , unceasingly , patiently. To be born again in your arms ; To be born again for your sake ; Once again to wait to be born in a golden egg; Once again to be able to fly with silver wings ; Unhurriedly , tenaciously , intimately To be born again for your sake; To turn the bliss of our meeting into a gentle light; And the parting that's sure to come into smothering rain; Like the little indigo flower that blooms in deciate shade. Your taking my hand and my not shaking it off; Our two paths merging to become one blending minds. To be born again for my sake; When my not minding the loneliness; Was only the ignorance of my bliss with you When my pain of loneliness Was but my learning the fear of losing you. As old shells crumble off and newborn tears fall on a cheek with your embrace open my ethereal wings letting me forget with your voice and your touch breaking off the chains that blind my heart and feet. to be born again in your arms... |
As I watch the snowflakes fall
They melt into the tears That already grace my cheeks The burning flame inside my soul Becomes frozen by the negative emotions coming from you You watch as I twist and turn from the ties you hold on me Yet forever watching over me Is the one that will punish you Worse than you hurt me |
Awesome poems people! ^_^ Now lemmi contribute as well... XD
The Dreading Uncontrollable vengeance Fighting to restrain Knowing anger and grievance Never-ending pain Feel my dreading Clenched fists Challenging glares Rage is just the gist Of my gritted bare Feel my dreading Wanting to stop it To just freeze everything Comes back to haunt Coldness of the world sings Feel my dreading Death descends Ever-impending doom The prophecy of end Hidden in the gloom Feel my dreading Hatred manipulates Trapped in one's body The darkness escalates Can't break free Feel my dreading Tales of the dead Awakening the worst Resisting my fate But unable to curse Feel my dreading One last hope Life seeps in As you try to grope Just to find a helpless grin Feel my dreading Falling out of love That hope is lost As my bleeding heart lurks In the shadow of yours I dread... I wrote this during one of my darker periods... ^_^; I don't deny its imperfections.. But they (my dark periods) come rare to me, lol, so maybe I lack the experience? :confused: Hope it's worthy of being here though, hehe... :mtongue: |
I'd be quite surprised if you didn't post it here! :rolleyes: (not to mention I have my personal copy of it stored safely in my swiss vault ^_^). Cooly you've been running us around with that one poem long enough. I demand you write another ^______________^
Awesome poem bro! You rock! *high five* ...I still carry that flask of holy water on my sash just in case I feel your dreading :D |
Thoughts of you I've never experienced feelings like this before- so intense they're almost overwhelming. I know we've only known each other for a short time, but you caught me with my defenses down and captured my heart before I knew what was happening. Ever since that moment, my days have been filled with thoughts of you. And a happiness that keeps me skipping a couple of inches off the ground. |
oh! Nice poem though I dare say it wasn't very dark. In fact it felt fun and frolicky and awesome! ^_^
Sly-san may I ask you a question? I was quite intrigued by the fact that the poem you posted was mostly prose and when constructed into a straight sentece would still fall within the rules of prosaic grammar. I was curious to know if it was intended that way? :confused: Some styles of poetry actually seek to do that so I was wondering if you subscribe to that... ^_^ Nice going though! |
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I walk in the dark that once was light
Surrounded by hope, I wish all night That in this world that we could belong Maybe if I wrote you a simple song If only our fates would collide Then I could be by your side But as the stars are shining Our hearts are crying I wonder if I would ever fly I’ll never know if I don’t try I dream of wings to hold me high To ride with you up in the sky I’ll sleep under the moon And the light won’t come to soon Because I’m not the sun Our shadows have just begun Now the sound of our song is fading away And I just wish that you would stay Another boundary that we have cross A friend in you, which I have lost Past the stars, past the sky Deep in my heart I wonder why This turned out to be There never was a we Yet I wish I could have it all Without you I’d fall If only I could just see you smile Even if it’s only for a while The music that has played will play no more Because the melody we have ignored But the words say though I still love you I wrote it yesterday I still have yet to come up with a title for it. |
OMG! This is outstanding! Look at the creativity in this thread :eek:
@Aku-San - That was really well written. I like the rhyme scheme and the connected storyline of the poem. It would be even more outstanding with a fixed meter! Great going guys! I sure am looking to read more from ya'll ^_^ @Sly-San - Teehee! Well you make it sound like you're an old shaolin monk :rolleyes:. You should post up your new poems then! Wouldn't hurt this thread I'm sure :p |
Yelling The yelling gets louder, And louder. I don't know why, But it gets louder, By the moment. No one, can control it, Not even them. I won't butt in, Because it will hurt my thoughts. Finally the yelling, Has calm down... But it won't last, For a little while. Then once again, The yelling starts all over. Its like an old fashioned movie. It's reran, over and over. I don't know why, They can't settle it, In a more quieter way. |
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But I'm afraid dark moments aren't my fort`e, lol... Maybe a couple of years down the road? :mtongue: P.S. keep up the good work guys, I can see potential for this thread :cool: |
srryyy its so long ><
i just wrote this ^.^ i can see you still watching me i can feel you still holding me i can hear you whispering in my ear i can sense you still there i try to fight you you win again i try to escape you you find me again you are there and i cannot stand it leave me be leave me be i call out to the others they hear my call they come to me and demolish you all you cannot live on i wont let you go find another to haunt go find another to whisper evil things to go find another to kill go go go the others take you away and they send you back you scream in anger i tremble at the sound go back go back leave me leave me never never will i see you watching me never never will i feel you still holding me never never will I hear you whispering in my ear never never will i sense you still there you are gone |
Good going there onex! First time I've specifically seen a haunting theme on a poetry thread :rolleyes:
I'm quite curious though onex-san, do you feel that one word lines accent the poem? :rolleyes: |
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and wats with the rolling of the eyes!?!?! do u not like it? wats wrong with it??? |
I was really really really depressed when i wrote this so please excuse the really darkenss of it.
I can't take this anymore The brusies and cuts are so sore My life is becoming such a bore I really have nothing to live for Faking lauhgs and smiles today Only my mask cna hide my pain No one can even being to say That I'm being held here with a chain Too many years I hvaen't been sorry Lies and flase hopes have kept me sadder This is my life, not a soap opera story Open cuts keep on getting badder So I seal my deal and close the book Years of pain and hate are at an end I can fianlly say I'm off live's hook Anyone have a casket they could lend? |
maybe i should kill
maybe i should murder them all maybe just maybe i might do it no ...maybe i wont .... tell me dark prince what u would like im your slave to you like the the light to a star... tell me... do u wish pain do u wish love are do u demand i kill for no one else tell me my prince do u wish i kill my slef????..... |
@onex-san - Not at all. I think they accent the poem too. I've never used them in my poems so I was just trying to learn if there was a specific way in which you use them. For e.g. most of the lines are three words so having one word lines is basically one third of a normal line. If you had used say.. seven words per line and again used one word lines it would look even more apparent but that might not have achieved the theme you were weaving.
So before I end up confusing myself and everybody else here, I was just trying to learn how people use one word lines so I could experiment with them later. I think it's a great poem! Go onex-san! *whoots* @Tifa - :eek: sca-ree! Short but very descriptive. Nice going! @SweetS - Sis!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :rheart: :rheart: :rheart: It's been so long! Excellent poetry as always. It's just amazing how you come up with stuff like that. I've made a nice little SweetS collection from all the poems in your old thread. It's sooo goood to see you here *hugs x a million* |
[quote=AoshiShinomori;289235]@onex-san - Not at all. I think they accent the poem too. I've never used them in my poems so I was just trying to learn if there was a specific way in which you use them. For e.g. most of the lines are three words so having one word lines is basically one third of a normal line. If you had used say.. seven words per line and again used one word lines it would look even more apparent but that might not have achieved the theme you were weaving.
So before I end up confusing myself and everybody else here, I was just trying to learn how people use one word lines so I could experiment with them later. I think it's a great poem! Go onex-san! *whoots* [quote] o ok thank you tho ^.^ i just randumly write poems ^.^ im gunna post another in jsut a moment |
why thank you muhahahahahahahaha
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the other nite
as i lay dreaming i dreamed i held you again you were telling me how much you loved me you were telling me that i was wat you needed i kissed your check, my dear and you dissapeared my arms were empty not even a whisper of proof that you were there when i awoke i found that it was true you had left me and my arms were empty again |
I sit here
Watching Waiting Wondering About my future The world is a lonely Cold Place to be w/o someone you love. |
on silent feet you follow
in the shadows you hide waiting for the right moment to strike the hatered is in your eyes as you stare at my progress your fingers itching wanting to land the final blow knowing that you will be at peace you inch forward the closer you get the harder your heart grows cold and distant are your feelings calm and collected your nerves as you land the final blow standing over me gloating in your victory a final tear falls from me your venegance complete your heart returned... a life for a life |
these all sound so cool so i guess it's my turn too.
hush little emodon't you cry razor blades will be comeing by parents hate you, friends betray. life is slowly slipping away hush little emo dont say a word. one day you'll be at home in the world. lonely,hurt and betrayed. one day it'll all just go away parents care and friends will adore once they hear the knock at the door. you've dissappeared and died in gore all cut up and sliced somemore so hush little emo dont be afraid one day it'll all just go away you've sliced you wrist and died in peace you lay there lifeless at their feet they cry they hurt they appologize but still you lay there sliced. no more can you hurt no more can you feel the better the price the better the deal it's to late for sorrys and appologies for you'll never walk wit them again. so hush little emo just lay there and reat. soon they'll all be just like this |
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