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and wats with the rolling of the eyes!?!?! do u not like it? wats wrong with it??? |
I was really really really depressed when i wrote this so please excuse the really darkenss of it.
I can't take this anymore The brusies and cuts are so sore My life is becoming such a bore I really have nothing to live for Faking lauhgs and smiles today Only my mask cna hide my pain No one can even being to say That I'm being held here with a chain Too many years I hvaen't been sorry Lies and flase hopes have kept me sadder This is my life, not a soap opera story Open cuts keep on getting badder So I seal my deal and close the book Years of pain and hate are at an end I can fianlly say I'm off live's hook Anyone have a casket they could lend? |
maybe i should kill
maybe i should murder them all maybe just maybe i might do it no ...maybe i wont .... tell me dark prince what u would like im your slave to you like the the light to a star... tell me... do u wish pain do u wish love are do u demand i kill for no one else tell me my prince do u wish i kill my slef????..... |
@onex-san - Not at all. I think they accent the poem too. I've never used them in my poems so I was just trying to learn if there was a specific way in which you use them. For e.g. most of the lines are three words so having one word lines is basically one third of a normal line. If you had used say.. seven words per line and again used one word lines it would look even more apparent but that might not have achieved the theme you were weaving.
So before I end up confusing myself and everybody else here, I was just trying to learn how people use one word lines so I could experiment with them later. I think it's a great poem! Go onex-san! *whoots* @Tifa - :eek: sca-ree! Short but very descriptive. Nice going! @SweetS - Sis!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :rheart: :rheart: :rheart: It's been so long! Excellent poetry as always. It's just amazing how you come up with stuff like that. I've made a nice little SweetS collection from all the poems in your old thread. It's sooo goood to see you here *hugs x a million* |
[quote=AoshiShinomori;289235]@onex-san - Not at all. I think they accent the poem too. I've never used them in my poems so I was just trying to learn if there was a specific way in which you use them. For e.g. most of the lines are three words so having one word lines is basically one third of a normal line. If you had used say.. seven words per line and again used one word lines it would look even more apparent but that might not have achieved the theme you were weaving.
So before I end up confusing myself and everybody else here, I was just trying to learn how people use one word lines so I could experiment with them later. I think it's a great poem! Go onex-san! *whoots* [quote] o ok thank you tho ^.^ i just randumly write poems ^.^ im gunna post another in jsut a moment |
why thank you muhahahahahahahaha
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the other nite
as i lay dreaming i dreamed i held you again you were telling me how much you loved me you were telling me that i was wat you needed i kissed your check, my dear and you dissapeared my arms were empty not even a whisper of proof that you were there when i awoke i found that it was true you had left me and my arms were empty again |
I sit here
Watching Waiting Wondering About my future The world is a lonely Cold Place to be w/o someone you love. |
on silent feet you follow
in the shadows you hide waiting for the right moment to strike the hatered is in your eyes as you stare at my progress your fingers itching wanting to land the final blow knowing that you will be at peace you inch forward the closer you get the harder your heart grows cold and distant are your feelings calm and collected your nerves as you land the final blow standing over me gloating in your victory a final tear falls from me your venegance complete your heart returned... a life for a life |
these all sound so cool so i guess it's my turn too.
hush little emodon't you cry razor blades will be comeing by parents hate you, friends betray. life is slowly slipping away hush little emo dont say a word. one day you'll be at home in the world. lonely,hurt and betrayed. one day it'll all just go away parents care and friends will adore once they hear the knock at the door. you've dissappeared and died in gore all cut up and sliced somemore so hush little emo dont be afraid one day it'll all just go away you've sliced you wrist and died in peace you lay there lifeless at their feet they cry they hurt they appologize but still you lay there sliced. no more can you hurt no more can you feel the better the price the better the deal it's to late for sorrys and appologies for you'll never walk wit them again. so hush little emo just lay there and reat. soon they'll all be just like this |
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