English Native Speakers, Please Help!

[miyavikuun]

Originally Posted by masaegu

Could someone correct the following sentence? Any corrections will be appreciated. I'm most unsure about the 'monopolizing the eyes' part. Would an English speaker say that? Thanks in advance!

"I long to be a player like him, who can influence others and who can monopolize the eyes of the fans."

me i would say
"i want to be a player like him, he can influence others and draws the attention of the fans"
don't know if that helped but yeah...

[masaegu]

Thank you everyone! I appreciate all the help!