私の話

[Yuusuke]

Hey you all.
I'm working on a story. I'm having some trouble.

I'm writing a story about meeting a korean lady yesterday who can speak japanese.
and i started 3 sentences but I want to make sure I'm clear on somethings for I am a perfectionist.
here it is

昨日は仕事で韓国人と会った. here i was trying to say i met with a korean person
彼女の名前はコウです. Her names is Koh
背が高くておもうしおいくてかわいいです。she is tall,interesting and cute.
韓国で生まれてそだった。-she was born and raised in Korea
昨年に韓国からアメリカまでを来た。Last year she came from Korea to America.

Is this right or do I have corrections to make. please help (=

[duo797]

Originally Posted by Yuusuke

Hey you all.
I'm working on a story. I'm having some trouble.

I'm writing a story about meeting a korean lady yesterday who can speak japanese.
and i started 3 sentences but I want to make sure I'm clear on somethings for I am a perfectionist.
here it is

昨日は仕事で韓国人と会った. here i was trying to say i met with a korean person
彼女の名前はコウです. Her names is Koh
背が高くておもうしおいくてかわいいです。she is tall,interesting and cute.
韓国で生まれてそだった。-she was born and raised in Korea
昨年に韓国からアメリカまでを来た。Last year she came from Korea to America.

Is this right or do I have corrections to make. please help (=

Someone else correct me if I'm wrong but I believe 仕事 is a job as in a full time job, and I got the feeling that you were a student.

You should avoid using pronouns like 'he' and 'she' as a beginner, because your instinct will be to use it any time we would in english. I'm sure it's used sometimes, but you definitely don't need it here. I would've said コウといいます。 'She is called Koh'. I believe that 私の名前はディです pattern is just a basic way you're taught to introduce yourself as a foreigner that is never really used by native speakers.

背が高くておもしろくてかわいいです。
You had a decent sized spelling error for おもしろい

I can't tell you how to say 'born and raised' because I'm not sure and I think it's more of a set phrase in english.

In the final sentence, the を you're using marks a direct object. There is no direct object in your sentence and there doesn't need to be one. I can't say I've ever seen を used with the verb 来る。 I might just say 'Last year, she came to america.' 去年アメリカに来ました。

Good luck writing your story, I hope I've helped.

[Yuusuke]

Originally Posted by duo797

Someone else correct me if I'm wrong but I believe 仕事 is a job as in a full time job, and I got the feeling that you were a student.

You should avoid using pronouns like 'he' and 'she' as a beginner, because your instinct will be to use it any time we would in english. I'm sure it's used sometimes, but you definitely don't need it here. I would've said コウといいます。 'She is called Koh'. I believe that 私の名前はディです pattern is just a basic way you're taught to introduce yourself as a foreigner that is never really used by native speakers.

背が高くておもしろくてかわいいです。
You had a decent sized spelling error for おもしろい

I can't tell you how to say 'born and raised' because I'm not sure and I think it's more of a set phrase in english.

In the final sentence, the を you're using marks a direct object. There is no direct object in your sentence and there doesn't need to be one. I can't say I've ever seen を used with the verb 来る。 I might just say 'Last year, she came to america.' 去年アメリカに来ました。

Good luck writing your story, I hope I've helped.

Thank you. I've forgotten a lot from japanese class.

and i was trying to say for おもしろい　i was trying to list adjectives to describe her instead of using　と　over and over again.

I did forget the use of some particles.

[komitsuki]

Originally Posted by Yuusuke

彼女の名前はコウです. Her names is Koh

I'm guessing Koh is more likely a family name instead of given name.

And it should be コ instead of コウ since Japanese transliteration of Korean words tend to be syllable-oriented.

[Yuusuke]

Originally Posted by komitsuki

I'm guessing Koh is more likely a family name instead of given name.

And it should be コ instead of コウ since Japanese transliteration of Korean words tend to be syllable-oriented.

i'm on it.

And no Duo i'm not a student yet.
its my 仕事 not my アルバイト。

[komitsuki]

Originally Posted by Yuusuke

i'm on it.

First of all, I can't think of a Korean woman having a single-syllable given name.

Are you sure she has a given name that is not "Koh"?

[SHAD0W]

ユウスケさん、　なんでこの話を書いているのか？

[Yuusuke]

Originally Posted by shad0w

ユウスケさん、　なんでこの話を書いているのか？

れんしゅうすることが大好き。

[SceptileMaster]

I'm not great at Japanese but wouldn't it be に会った instead of と会った? Also isn't it a little strange to mix the informal and formal forms like that. I say this knowing I could be wrong but would like to bring it up anyway.

[Yuusuke]

Originally Posted by SceptileMaster

I'm not great at Japanese but wouldn't it be に会った instead of と会った? Also isn't it a little strange to mix the informal and formal forms like that. I say this knowing I could be wrong but would like to bring it up anyway.

1. when i used と会った　I just wanted it to make the sentence sound intentional that I was meeting her.
2. yes, i know i shouldn't mix them, but this was kind of a rough draft.