Check this translation, please

[lucagalbu]

Hi! I've found this phrase:
ライフストリム、それは星と星に生きる全ての源です。
I guess it means:
Lifestream: this is the source of everything who lives on the planet and of the planet itself.

I'd like to slightly transform this phrase in order to say:
Lifestream: this is the source of the life of everything who lives on the planet and of the planet itself:
ライフストリム、それは星と星に生きるの命の源です。
Is it right?

[Sashimister]

Originally Posted by lucagalbu

Hi! I've found this phrase:
ライフストリム、それは星と星に生きる全ての源です。
I guess it means:
Lifestream: this is the source of everything who lives on the planet and of the planet itself.

ライフストリム should be ライフストリーム.

who > that

I'd like to slightly transform this phrase in order to say:
Lifestream: this is the source of the life of everything who lives on the planet and of the planet itself:
ライフストリム、それは星と星に生きるの命の源です。
Is it right?

生きるの命　＞　生きる命　＞　生きる全ての命

[lucagalbu]

Originally Posted by Sashimister

who > that

Eheh..I make mistakes also in eneglish

Thank you!