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To Continue or Not to Continue -
07-06-2008, 10:04 AM
Ok, so I started writing this story about a year ago for my friend but never wrote on it again after the first page and I have been thinking about contining it but I'm not sure if anyone will like it. This is where you guys come it...I'll post what I have and I want to hear your truthful thoughts about it. Hate it? Love it? Not completely sure? It doesn't matter, tell me the truth even if it hurts because I want to know how it is....yeah. Anyway, here is what I have.
Just Another Dream Life Marie rushed into the school hallway, her face tinted red from the brisk air outside. Her blonde hair was pulled into a half-pony and she was wearing her favorite skinny jeans with her grey shirt, loose around her petite frame. She brushed her bangs out of her eyes and walked up to her friends that were huddled against a cream-colored wall. "Hey guys!" she said, her voice not very full of enthusiasm, her pale green eyes misty. "Hey...what's the matter?" Seirra questioned, her hazel eyes noting the hint of red around Marie's eyes. "Huh? Oh, um, it's nothing...just been rubbing at my eyes, that's all," Marie quickly explained, earning a raise of the eyebrow from her brunette friend. Why do I always have to lie to them? They know what is going on yet I still hide the truth Marie thought, mentally slapping herself. Alanna rolled her eyes as all of them walked past the close-knit group. They ruled the school. Popular kids pretty much. And unfortunately, they had the same locker hall as Marie, Sierra, Alanna and the rest of the group. Shane, the only one of them that actually spoke to other people, pulled Alanna into his muscled chest. "Hey baby. How's it going?" he whispered into her her. Alanna groaned and pulled herself out of his grasp, causing her black hair to wave in his face, "Get a life boy, find some other girl. I don't fall for that no more. Been 'round you for to long," she joked, her southern accent kicking in. "Well fine then, excuse me for wanting to show my love for a beautiful lady," Shane laughed lightly then turned to open his locker. Even though he hung with the populars, he had always had a thing for Alanna and everyone had caught on but her. Everyone gave a pitiful sigh of defeat, hoping today was the day Alanna would see his true feelings but to no avail. Marie shut her bottom locker and started to head toward her first period class. She wasn't in the mood to talk and Sierra silently walked beside her. "Hey, May, what's the matter?" she questioned, using Marie's old nickname in hopes of cheering her up. "What do you think? They were at it again as I left for the bus," Marie replied, referring to the continuous fights her parents had. "Aw, I'm sorry girl," Sierra gave her closest friend a quick hug before walking into the first period of torture. They both set their books at the desks they always sat at and waited for the bell to ring. It was only Marie and Sierra in this class and they knew it was going to be a long period. Except, one thing happened that they hadn't been expecting. "Oh, my, goodness," Sierra murmured. Well, that's all I have. I have no idea why I ended it there but I did....so what do y'all think? 
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07-06-2008, 10:14 AM
I loved it but now i cant wait to see what happens so you better finish it because i cant wait very long to find out what happens in stories.>^_^<
 I could never be happier. I found my missing piece and i know he wont leave me. song by simple plan. +{Member of the Crusnik Clan--Crusnik 04}+ +{Codename: Abel}+ I'm sorry for acting like this...
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07-06-2008, 10:15 AM
Its a good start. One piece of advice though, you dont have to be so descriptive about what people are saying. For example:
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07-06-2008, 10:27 AM
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07-06-2008, 10:34 AM
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Anyhow, if you have a story to write, just do it. Dont worry if its great or not. Write what you can and you can always go back and change things or fix stuff later. The most important thing is that you continue on. Think of it as practice to become a better writer.
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07-06-2008, 10:42 AM
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07-06-2008, 10:53 AM
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An outline may also help. You know writing out ahead of time the events that will happen. Then just fill in the stuff between. Writing about personal stuff is also good. It is the easiest thing to write about. And you dont have to share it with anyone. Just do it as practice. And one day it will exist as a record of your lifes experiences. Those are precious, or at least one day they will be, even the mundane things.
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07-06-2008, 11:06 AM
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A lot of things are summaries that I had written out and I have a few chapter stories but they are mainly fanfiction...I dunno, I guess my stories get based off my life because I usually only write when something happens to me. And I have my journal for my personal things...though a lot of pages are torn out because my mom read it
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07-06-2008, 01:08 PM
Ok....I think I am going to continue this story because I was thinkinn it over and it just seems that I could start on it again. I dunno when I'll start it but I will...someday. and when I do, I will post it up here
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07-06-2008, 01:37 PM
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I could never be happier. I found my missing piece and i know he wont leave me. song by simple plan. +{Member of the Crusnik Clan--Crusnik 04}+ +{Codename: Abel}+ I'm sorry for acting like this...
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