Im writing a book, and i need opinions!

[BlackPheonix]

So im writing a book about a girl, who is the middle child of three. She gets sent to someplace to begin her years in highschool. Yet when she gets there, secrets hide behind every corner, and she finds herself afraid for her life. She knows she isnt one of them, and she know's that theyknow it too.

Right now, i have part of chapter 1. Can i have any ideas, before i post the story? and i also need a few questions to be anwsered.

1: what place should she go to?
2: im adding fantasy into this, im thinking about vampires and warlocks...is this good enough?
3:does what i have so far have enough body to actually start a series?

Thank you!

[Eiri]

1. Can i have any ideas, before i post the story?
yeah sure, I'm writing two books, One by myself the other with Sly, so I can help you

1: what place should she go to?

well the girl isnt anywhere near home so, she'll need to befriend someone or have someone save her when she gets stuck in a situation, so more than likely whoever saves her, takes her to his/her place

2: im adding fantasy into this, im thinking about vampires and warlocks...is this good enough?

I think so, but your the author, if it does seem enough add more, then read it over, but if you still dont like it, you might want to review and ask yourself "what do I want?"

3:does what i have so far have enough body to actually start a series?

Possibly and only if you make it into a series. Right now you maybe thinking "I wanna get three (idk just picking a number) books out of this stoy" but once you start writing you may realize that you may want to keep it at one book, it all depends on how you decide to end the book


from one unknown author to another, this the best I can give you, need anything else pm me

[BlackPheonix]

ah i see thank you very much! your info is greatly appreciated!!!


and you answer for # 2 is defenently is helpful. but i was kinda looking at something more along the lines of an actual place(i.e.-tokyo, new amsterdam, i dont know, some random place.)

[ThirdSight]

The synopsis you've posted is so vague I literally have no idea what it's about, save for a chick going to high school. Anyhoo, let's see:

Can I have any ideas, before I post the story?
Ideas about what? If you're looking for people to literally put an idea out there for you to take, you have an incredibly warped view of how the creative process works. True enough, writers are the best theives, but that's just rediculous. Be more specific, and I can help you out with this.

What place should she go to?
Once again, I don't know what you mean. Isn't she going to high school?

I'm adding fantasy into this, I'm thinking about vampires and warlocks...is that good enough?
Good enough for what? For a sci-fi novel; no. For a book that sounds like the Twilight series with a bit of World of Warcraft; yes.

Does what I have so far has enough body to actually start a series?
I highly doubt it.

It sounds like you have a good idea in your head, but that's it. There's a lot more (a hell of a lot more) to writing a story than just getting an idea and begin scratching at your keyboard. And, once again, if you have any questions about it, drop me a line; I'd be happy to help.

[Salvanas]

Firstly: I agree with Thirdsight, you need to tell us more.

Now for your questions;

1: What place should she go to?

- What do you mean?

2: im adding fantasy into this, im thinking about vampires and warlocks...is this good enough?

If you are going to add fantasy, stay away from vampires. Try and broaden your mind abit more than vampires. If you're writing fantasy, you have your whole IMAGINATION to work with. Why pigeon hole yourself into cliche things?

3:does what i have so far have enough body to actually start a series?

By the looks of it, no. Writing a book is more than an 'idea'. That is the starting point. Think of it this way. A book is like a cake.

The idea is like thinking "What type of cake" it is.
The plan is the recipe.
The words are the ingredients.
Your mind is the mixing bowl.
Your style is the oven.

You can't simply "get an idea" and then hope it'll become a series. And don't STRIVE to make it into a series, take your time with it. Other wise it'll fall down all around your ears.

[JaneXia]

I've been writing fiction stories for years
so here is my suggestion:

The question is, 'where she should go?'
-Since she is going to her high school, then perhaps the school can be in an isolated place like out of town, in the middle of forest, etc. Where she cannot go out or escape easily. And if she has a plan to go out, then she will have difficulties or she might think twice because her parents will think something like she is not doing well in school... and of course.. if she say that she is not like 'them', then her parents might think she's crazy...

Next is the adding of fantasy
-To make your story original, i suggest you erase the warlocks in the list... (that my opinion though... if you insist on putting them, then its fine with me). And it depends on the type of power the rest of the students have. Vampires are fine with me...
and I also have an idea about this... why not... 'ghosts or phantoms'?... since they are ghosts, AND students... the place they died is at the school (of course!) then all you have to think about is WHY they died and HOW...

Does what you have so far have enough body to start?
-For me... no
When writing ANY kind of story... the writer must always have the answers whenever the reader has one question like... 'what happened?'...'why did it happened'.... 'how did it happen'... and so on... and now, like a reader like me, just posting the small details... there are some questions that popped up in my mind.. here:
"How did they know about the school?"
"Why and who decided to let her to go in that school?"
"Was her eldest sibling went to the same school? Yes or no and why?"
and... "What inspired you to do the story?" just want to know... ^^"
You can think about my questions... (its alright if you don't post the replies... so its a surprise ) but if you have it... then ignore ^^

hope that helps

[JaneXia]

I've been writing fiction stories for years
so here is my suggestion:

The question is, 'where she should go?'
-Since she is going to her high school, then perhaps the school can be in an isolated place like out of town, in the middle of forest, etc. Where she cannot go out or escape easily. Writing a fantasy, you can always make your own place... make your own world... your own continents... your own countries... cities... towns... you can all make it imaginary... because if its real... then people might think its REAL... ^^"
And if she has a plan to go out, then she will have difficulties or she might think twice because her parents will think something like she is not doing well in school... and of course.. if she say that she is not like 'them', then her parents might think she's crazy...

Next is the adding of fantasy
-To make your story original, i suggest you erase the warlocks in the list... (that my opinion though... if you insist on putting them, then its fine with me). And it depends on the type of power the rest of the students have. Vampires are fine with me...
and I also have an idea about this... why not... 'ghosts or phantoms'?... since they are ghosts, AND students... the place they died is at the school (of course!) then all you have to think about is WHY they died and HOW...

Does what you have so far have enough body to start?
-For me... no
When writing ANY kind of story... the writer must always have the answers whenever the reader has one question like... 'what happened?'...'why did it happened'.... 'how did it happen'... and so on... and now, like a reader like me, just posting the small details... there are some questions that popped up in my mind.. here:
"How did they know about the school?"
"Why and who decided to let her to go in that school?"
"Was her eldest sibling went to the same school? Yes or no and why?"
and... "What inspired you to do the story?" just want to know... ^^"
You can think about my questions... (its alright if you don't post the replies... so its a surprise ) but if you have it... then ignore ^^

hope that helps

[SceptileMaster]

What do you mean by start a series? Do you mean to get a published series of books?