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in all honesty, I really like it. I had a lot of trouble thinking of ways to improve it. biggest problem i have (which isnt even a very big problem) is her right arm. it looks nice, it seems correct to me. its just that since its coming straight out towards the camera, u really cant see much of the arm at all. so i was thinking maybe move it out a bit? up? down? just somewhere so that the silhouette would read better.

Here is a paint over i drew:

but i'm not happy with the way the arm looks up there... i think to the side would be better.

also... i dont know if this is just because of the clothes but she seems really flat chested lol
or maybe she just is like that... i dont know.
that one i'll leave up to you to decide.

anyways I like it! good luck in the competition! please post some progress updates! i'd love to see the finished product.

oh and, i agree about the eyes, should be more... round, and ... cute-sy-ish, ya know?
gracias and Arigatou! you just gave me some ideas. this character is actually based off a comic i am making, so her chubby funsters arent that big

i want to correct that arm because the long sleeves come off a bit weird, especially on the right arm. its a bit tilted but i plan to correct that when i sketch the final draft later. its because its for a drawing contest and the theme is pocky so i wanted her to hold a box of strawberry flavored pocky. i think i might raise the right arm up just a bit so you can see the arm.


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04-30-2009, 05:31 AM

This was my one of my newest:



What I'm aware of:

- Arm length
- Weird right foot
- Bad/lazy hands
- Maybe the shoulders are weird looking at it~

Oh yeah and the Momoko speedpaint:

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I WANT THAT KAMIKAZE GIRLS PICTURE! thats awesome


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I WANT THAT KAMIKAZE GIRLS PICTURE! thats awesome
Thank you ^_^ I love Kamikaze Girls~ I'm going to do one of Ichiko too!
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I fixed the eyes and added more detail to the dress
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04-30-2009, 08:28 AM

Just trying to catch up on this thread this morning, so forgive me if I've left anyone out.

RKitagawa - Vastly improved, although your caterpillar should be a little further left. The image now draws the eye in rather than repelling it.

AlanX - Sorry, our firewall blocks the server your images are hosted on, so I can't comment

MissMisa - The face is angled incorrectly to sit naturally on the head. The head is facing to our left just a little (by the placement of her right cheek and left jawbone), yet her eyes, nose and mouth match the placement of a head facing to our right just a little.

Kyousuke - That's coming along brilliantly! Can't wait to see the finished result

For those of you seeking feedback on your artistic skills, I heartily reccommend the ImagineFX forum: ImagineFX - Forums
They're an extremely helpful community, and it's not uncommon for artists posting there to be published in the magazine itself

As for posting something of my own? Hmm. I tend to do portraits more than scenes in my drawings, and my photography is mostly animals. Here are a few:







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k so 2 more ^^
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Hmm. The white balance is off in this one. I assume you allowed your camera to auto white balance here?

When shooting white subjects, take a shot with AWB, then set your white balance / colour temperature to the shot you just took. That way your whites don't get greyed or blued out.

The camera has also underexposed the background due to the brightness of the flower. Bracketing could've helped you here again.

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All the dead buds in shot make this image look far less vibrant than it should. Some judicious pruning before exposure could've really livened this up. Failing that, this is one where a head-on shot with the stamen dead centre would've been fantastic - a little manipulation of the position of the flower might've been necessary to prevent your shadow touching it.

Remember, the trick with shooting flora is to get your hands in there and force it to look natural. Shooting things as they naturally are invariably leads to distractions and unwanted crud in the shot. Plants are great practice material because you can gently move them around to fit your purpose best.

One of the best flower macro photographers I know lists clothespegs, elastic bands, sticks, and a water mister among his most important equipment


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yay! chibi style... my.... favorite.....
ok i lied, i hate most chibi stuff. but hey, whatever floats your boat.

so, since i dont have too much time i'm gonna start with your faces/heads
overall they aren't too bad, you're off to a good start, but since they ARE chibi it's kinda hard to critique... i mean... they're messed up anatomically, but on purpose...
so even though it's wrong... at the same time it is right.

BUT! even though the style is "super deformed" you still have to follow the basic rules.
so, here's some pretty pictures i made for ya



so... in this picture, the guys head is tilted to his right.
if we look at the eyeline though (blue line) his eyes go on an angle opposite to that.
you should make a habit of drawing cross shaped lines across the center of the face. it will help to get the angles right.
this however, was only on this one guy, all your other pictures were good with the eyelines.

the overall problem you seem to have with the faces are the positions of the nose and mouth. and the size of your eyes.
your eyes are.... HUGE, even for a chibi i think they're a little big.

MOST IMPORTANTLY**
the nose should be half way between the eyes and the chin!
The mouth should be half way between the nose and the chin!
practice these things and you should be drawing more anatomically correct faces in no time.

as for the body, i can show you that next time.
so, thats all i got for you at this moment, hope i helped a bit.
if you have any questions i'd be glad to lend a hand.

sorry if that all sounded a little harsh btw, just trying to help out.
Bad thing is that I wasn't aiming for chibi style - or any anime style, for that matter. It's a style of my own that I've adapted; it was sorta supposed to follow the guidelines of huge (undetailed) eyes, and a lower placed nose (which is hard to do, considering I'm the kind of person that foams at the mouth for correct placement).

But I will agree that picture is a little off. It was a last minute drawing I did at the end of a test in chemistry class, so I don't really beat myself up for it like I usually would -_-;

Thanks for your comments
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