Poem: Scar From one Lover

[Eiri02]

I still dream about one love
affair in particular
The scent of her hair and
how my words use to tickle her
Call it Nostalgia or whatever you
will
Her laughter was nourishment
more so than any meal
I thought it was real more
unbreakable than any deal

...and shit...

I still dream about her
she was gorgeous all natural
or with her face powdered
Her soul was tailor made
it went perfect with her eyes
I thought I had found my heart
she was pain in disguise

...I guess...

The mind overrides LOVE
When you fall for its lies

By: Eric M.

[Eiri02]

Hope u enjoy this short Lament of love.

[nobora]

thats really beautiful

[Eiri02]

thank you! A poet is always happy to recieve complimants on his work...especially when it's about his hear being broken!!LOL

[nobora]

So this really happened? how sad.

[Eiri02]

Yes this is a true testiment...and you're right it is sad, and sadly this is just life

[nobora]

True , your right

[Eiri02]

Yes LOL...but once one is able to write these things out for others to read and relate to they can begin to recover from these everday tragedies

[MMM]

I know this is going to make me sound like an ass, but I know this from experience:

If you want your artwork to impact in the the most meaningful way, just check your spelling. The first spelling error completely ejected me from any emotional impact the poem might have had on me.

You took the time to change the color and italics. Next time take the time to spell-check.

[Eiri02]

Originally Posted by MMM

I know this is going to make me sound like an ass, but I know this from experience:

If you want your artwork to impact in the the most meaningful way, just check your spelling. The first spelling error completely ejected me from any emotional impact the poem might have had on me.

You took the time to change the color and italics. Next time take the time to spell-check.

Thanx I just edited it LOL...if u see anything I've overlooked feel free to let me know...and thank you again!