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10-05-2010, 09:31 PM

wow thats amazing..
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10-06-2010, 03:43 PM

A long one this time! ^_^ Meant to be performed as Slam Poetry.

This is NOT a rhyme,
not to a sing-song voice that says "Loooooove meeeeee!"
because I TELL my story.

NO

Not an artificial "I'm too sad to cope, so I'll spit my words out by struggling to say what I mean to say by not saying exactly what I mean by meaning what I say only as long as I'm saying it"...

NO

Not a torn-out "I live in the ghetto and got abused by my girlfriend too many times, too many bullets in the head, so many times that I can't believe I didn't realize sooner" I've heard so many times I can't believe I'm still listening

NO

My life is not a beat from the street, not a sad expose of how I turned my life around, not the insanity of being a loner, unwanted, afraid, manhandled, passionate, creative--

All I am saying is

I don't write poetry

I've never seen the sun in the stars or the stars in the moon or the moon in your hair--but I CAN say it's been dyed too many times. So many, in fact, that it resembles the crater-strewn dried out surface of an uninhabitable rock.

My story cannot be stretched out, blown up, used to float through the layers of the atmosphere, layers of belief, religion, living, dying, moral ethics, logical physics, wildly played out fantasies of a person who knows who they are already because

I don't know who I am yet.

Am I a Catholic-Jew-woman-person-lover-hater-fighter-follower-believer-skeptic-critic-dancer-singer-artist--

I can at least be that.

But a poet...that's been overplayed too many times.
I hear "Poetry" and I say,
"Shit! Now this class is going to take ten times as long and make one-tenth the amount a' sense!"
Rhymes, riddles, metaphors, between the lines, between the sheets, love, passion, understanding, hating, reasoning, the image of an image beyond an image behind an image of the man you sat down with on the bench while you were listening to your iPod and he was feeding the birds bread out of a paper bag--

God All Mighty have mercy on our souls!

Cuz dat ain't my gig dawg. Thasnot how I roll.

So where do I belong, if it's not with the poets?

Am I even a person?

Unable to express what I believe, my personality, my insanity, the reason for my existence, my persistence through life despite the constant crying of WHY WHY WHY WHY am I still alive? Dragging my feet through the marshes of humanity, the surrealism of reality, eternity of suffering through a poetry class without ending, a destination without a beginning, meaning in only what we mean, not what we say, constantly playing behind the covers of a lovers' bed with his (or her's) ex, only to find out later that your lover was also playing the same game, and you feel cheated, defeated, lied to, you're ready to take your own life with the blade of Juliet, but then you realize something!

Your fingers grip the pen...shaking...afraid for eons about what you want to say...finally, you can say what you mean.

Waste Land great Byzantium okay Arcadia intriguing Rent I like the idea Eternity Program in the making Sesame Street good for kids--

What the FUCK is up with South Park?

Everyone around me everywhere is playing off these misguided spurts of idiocy and framing them as masterpieces--am I the only one who doesn't get it,

AM I THE ONLY ONE WHO DOESN'T UNDERSTAND?!

Left outside of a crowd born to take the world, live it, love it, and die in a rose-scented coffin with a violin playing soft sultry music in the background to the beat of 'I Kissed a Girl' and later 'See You Again'--

NO

I don't want to write poetry. I want to write history.



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10-07-2010, 12:16 PM

Not sure about the soul but I wrote this some time ago regarding/ WHAT HAPPENS to children!





IMPOSSIBLE CHOICE

"To the father"

How could you leave her, did you Ever Care
Twas lies you whispered in her ear
love just a game to pass the time
till you were told

Soon your baby you will hold

Did you jump for joy? a dad you'd be
oh no that's just a ploy
A wedding?
Help You've some place else to go

"The Mother"

so now she's left all alone
Her parents threw her out
what could a single woman do
Now she's "Up the Spout"

Social Services don't care
"Have it adopted dear"
they whisper in her ear

The Mum to be tries here tries there
but all alone she stays
till in desperations thrall she screams
"Oh God Damn you all"

A Loving Couple are waiting dear
for your precious babe
A better life they'll give her dear
Be sensible--sign here"

So Now the dreadful deed is done.

"To the Child"

Goodbye my darling child
Remember how I loved you
as I held you in my arms
No other choice was there for me
No place to live-No Place to go
No sort of life for You.

your special parents will love you dear
but not as much as I
for every day that crashes past
is one day less that I have spent
with "You" my precious child.

WHen you are grown, please understand
I really had no choice
my love for you

a Painful sacrifice

If in my place you stood

What then would be your choice?
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10-07-2010, 10:08 PM

very nice dogsbody! I liked how you addressed not only the mother and father, but also the child, answering an appeal for understanding by posing a new question, "What then would be your choice?" I think it's a very cool poem!


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10-08-2010, 01:20 PM

thankyou
MuRaSaKiiNkI. It is basically about a woman having to give up her baby, because there used to be so much bigotry for single women to be pregnant- so many were forced to give up their baby's. either into the care system or to be adopted.

Later when the adult child starts searching for his or her parent-- they can have much anger and misunderstandings. Many think that they just were not wanted, so grow up thinking bad thoughts about their mother especially.

I believe in many of the States in America it can still be difficult to find out their roots-- some States still prevent them finding out.
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10-08-2010, 01:25 PM

this was to my own mother-- I only knew her for three months at the end of the war------------ never seen her since and left it too late to search for her.




Mother Mum Billie

Mother, did you ever care
About the child you bore
Discarded at the sign of War

Was it convenient-- Hitlers threat
Your child--she's weeping even now
to think that you could so forget
about the child you bore
mistreated at the end of War

Mother--did you ever dream
ponder, wonder, make believe
about the child you bore
Mother did you Ever Love
That plain rejected lonely child

Even at the dawn of peace
were you there to comfort her?

Mother just how did it feel
Waiting in that heaving crowd
would your husband chuck you out
The kid's not His, he'd shout and clout

Mother were you really Scared to meet
that nuisance of a brat
just cos it's the end of war

Mother did you hate her so
That pale excited little girl
Treat her badly for a while
So when she'd gone
You'd wear a smile
out of sight---Out of mind

Mother --was this true
did you ever ever care
about the child you bore
Just before the fear of War

Mother as the years rolled by
Did you ever ever sigh
long to see the woman grown
Maybe even family

Mother--its so sad to know
you died alone
No-one cared

Mother I believe the price was paid
When in your coffin you were laid

Mother can you now forgive
my anger, hatred through these years

my search for you was just too late
for you and I will never know
Reunion on this earth

So please forgive that child you bore
For after all You gave her life

Yes

Her Precious Life

Thanks Mum.
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10-08-2010, 01:39 PM

this is not apoem but perhaps food for thought:




iT IS RAINING RAIN AND FEELINGS INTO THE EARTH AND THEY ARE TRODDEN DEEPLY SUBMERGED UNTIL THEY FLOW INTO THE ROCKS BELOW. THEY ARE LOST AMONGST THE FOSSILS OF THE CENTURIES. LONG FORGOTTEN AS IF THEY NEVER DID EXIST.NO MATTER HOW HARD WE RACE AND RUN TO HOLD THEM BACK WE WILL NEVER RETRIEVE THEM-- NEVER CATCH A GLIMPSE OF WHAT WAS TRUE OR WHAT WAS FALSE.

WOULD A FISHING NET SAVE THEM FROM CASCADING INTO THE DEPTHS? A FISHING NET HAS TOO MANY HOLES, WOULD A MERMAID CATCH THEM AS SHE SWIMS GALLANTLY TO SNATCH AT THEM AS THEY DESCEND SO SWIFTLY INTO THE TORRENTS OF TIME.

SHE WOULD NEED TO SWIM FASTER THAN IS POSSIBLE BECAUSE THOSE FEELINGS WISH TO BE LOST AND NEVER DISPLAYED TO A SOUL IN THE WORLD.

HOW SAD IT IS.DID THEY HAVE A SOUL? PERHAPS ANOTHER SOUL MIGHT CATCH THEM BEFORE TOO LATE THEY ARE FOREVER LOST AND MANGLED.

PERHAPS THEY NEVER DID EXIST.

DO HUMANS EVEN EXIST OR ARE THEY TOO JUST A FIGMENT OF THE IMAGINATION THAT CAN BE SCORED OUT WITHIN A BLINK OF AN EYE.

WHY BE BORN AT ALL? WHAT IS THE POINT OF ARRIVING ON THIS EARTH? IS IT ALL A CONTINUOUS LESSON THAT SOMEHOW IS NEVER LEARNED.

WHAT IS A HUMAN BEING? WHY DO THEY EXIST? WHAT REASON CAN THERE BE TO ARRIVE ON EARTH AT ALL WHEN ALL THEY DO IS KILL EACH OTHER SOMETIMES WITH UNSEEN THOUGHTS THAT PENETRATE THE SOUL. IS IT NOT BETTER TO BE KILLED BY THE SWORD RATHER THAN THE HIDDEN SECRETS OF THE MIND.

THOSE THAT TORTURE OTHERS BY THEIR ACTIONS OR LACK OF ACTIONS THOSE THAT HIDE THEIR THOUGHTS BEHIND A MASK.

WHY ALL THE SECRETS? ROBOTS NEED NO FEELINGS BUT HUMAN BEINGS DO OTHERWISE THEY MAY AS WELL BE ROBOTS TOO.

WHAT DID OSCAR WILDE WRITE?

"AND ALL MEN KILL THE THING THEY LOVE
BY ALL LET THIS BE HEARD
SOME DO IT WITH A BITTER LOOK
SOME WITH A FLATTERING WORD
THE COWARD DOES IT WITH A KISS
THE BRAVE MAN WITH A SWORD!

SO DOES THIS MEAN THAT NO MAN SHOULD DARE TO LOVE ANOTHER? ONE CAN NEVER LOVE WITHOUT BEING HURT.

IS IT SO MUCH EASIER TO SUPPRESS ALL FEELINGS AND JUST LIVE IN A VACUUM OF PRETENCE AND HAVE A BARBED WIRE CAGE SURROUND THE SOUL AND HEART?

IS IT BETTER TO NEVER HAVE KNOWN LOVE AND LEAD A COLD BLANK EXISTENCE WHERE FEELINGS AND EMOTIONS ARE NEVER ALLOWED TO EMERGE OR TAKE OVER. BE LIKE A BLOCK OF ICE?

PERHAPS BUT WHAT IS THE SAYING? "iT IS BETTER TO HAVE LOVED AND LOST THAN NEVER TO HAVE LOVED AT ALL." BUT THEN THAT MEANS TORMENT SO IS IT REALLY WORTH LOSING ONES HEART TO ANOTHER?
IS THE AGONY AND PAIN WORTH ALL THE ANGUISH WHEN LOVE IS REJECTED?

FOR THE ONE WHO LOVES? SHOULD THEY BECOME AS A WOODEN TOY THAT IS MANIPULATED BY OTHERS. iT SEEMS FOOLISHNESS INDEED. CAN THEY TAKE BACK THE LOVE THAT IS UNWANTED? WILL THE LOVED ONE EVEN NOTICE OR CARE? MOST LIKELY NOT.

IS A WOMAN ALLOWED TO LOVE ANOTHER WOMAN? IS IT A CRIME?

sorry this is all in capitals. I am unsure how to alter the font to lower case.

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Note: I am.. pretty bad at poetry. But, this is one I did about a month ago anywayy. xD
Oh how embarrassing..

When we met.. I was oh so young.
A mere thirteen
And you?
You were oh so old in my eyes.
Sixteen

But even though our ages, were so far apart.
Even though our parents,
Fought,
Grounded,
We never, never gave up our friendship.

A blink of my eyes, we fell in love.
A love I’d never felt before.
One I never wanted to give up.
One you never wanted to give away to another.

Another blink,
I’m fourteen.
You give me lilies and chocolate.

Soon enough,
You’re seventeen,
And our parents try to split us again.

This time, we emerge,
broken
scarred
and apart…

Oh how I missed you,
And I knew you missed me too.
Winter, Spring, Summer, Fall,

It all passes in a gaze, never remembering anything except for my heart,
Aching for you

One more blink of my eyes,
you’re there, next to me
kissing me softly,
begging for forgiveness,

And our hearts heal slowly as time passes.
Slowly, our parents,
Everyone,
They all realize it.
We need each other..

Now, We stand here.
Embracing as we start our lives together again,
just as we knew we would be doing years ago.

Happy Anniversary,
I told you we would be here.. ♥

Err.. tada? : D
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10-08-2010, 10:08 PM

ahh thats absolutely beautiful> thanks for sharing with us.
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10-08-2010, 10:23 PM

Thanks!
I actually thought it was bad, but okay. =3

Your poems are beautiful too. The one called "Mother Mum Billie",
almost made me cry. I loved it.


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