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8 | 25.00% |
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02-03-2008, 12:40 AM
k, its been a while since i have posted any poems, and i know alt of people like them.
for now i have 2 poems to post: Bright Smile Big bright smile, so small and alone the sun the moon the stars have shown eyes that cry, my tears are dry bones on edge big bright light as bright as this fire fight big bright smile wont you stay for a while gazing to the moon, a moon with a smile lasting for a time, only for a time rest down your head, on a pillow of stars sleep with confort, in the confort of night eyes that smile happy and true please never lie because i love you (end) Rain Poem between sun set and twilight there is magic in all night falls silently explosion of colour in the sky secret deepinng shades of gray the rhythem of rain rumbles and whispers falling far enough to touch your skin its dark oh so dark the rain comes and goes but we sleep the ground shakes and sky splits but we sleep only thunder, only thunder we wake to gray skys leting it rain, let it rain icy sweetness, our skin wll dry tonights full moon with gray skys letting it rain, rain on us but we sleep intermittenly (end) i am the tears that fall, you are the blood on my skin, we are mingled forever again, here we stand, hand in hand, but ill let go when my time has come, time for u to fly alone 
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02-03-2008, 01:17 AM
WOW! O_O... O_O... O_O... *silence* *faints*
Yurichan I don't know how you do it every time. Awesome poems. I really liked the smile poem. It had such wonderful visual appeal with the sun and the moon both in it! Great goin!  The rain poem seemed to end a little abruptly. It certainly gave a sense of rain with the description of thunder and repetitions of the word "rain", but the ending went with sleep... Was there more to it?  or did that signify the rain and thunder of bad dreams causing intermittent sleep? If so, that's really a deep thought! I'm very amazed O_O Omae mo kanjite no ka... kaze no koe?
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02-03-2008, 01:54 AM
haha, the way the rain poem ended was the way it was to end. kinda like how the rain and thuder can be so calming, making one feel sleepy and sleep longer.....like a forever sleep...ur the first to catch a glimps at what i ment with the ending of it...good work!
i am the tears that fall, you are the blood on my skin, we are mingled forever again, here we stand, hand in hand, but ill let go when my time has come, time for u to fly alone
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02-03-2008, 02:10 AM
my Bright Smile was a kinda love poem...hehe
i am the tears that fall, you are the blood on my skin, we are mingled forever again, here we stand, hand in hand, but ill let go when my time has come, time for u to fly alone
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02-07-2008, 06:55 AM
haha
heres 2 more i typed up, ill type up the other few tomorrow Leap of Faith: standing on the pier walking hand-in-hand looking over at you a background of golden sand kisses warm and soft saying i love you letting go of your hand i stand alone to watch the view you walk up behind me wrap your arms around my waist i shift the confort over my heart filled with distast i walk away from you i take a leap of faith just a gentle splash into a deep blue wave hearing your voice call to me come to take me home my mind says yes my heart says no lungs burn and heart pounds but i let it sink my life is over now im dead standing there you wimper trying to remeber her name you kissd that girl the night before now you wish you told that girl how all of it was wrong because now the one you loved before is now forever gone (end) Sickly Drip: a sickly drip steady and slick the only sound you hear is drip...drip...drip river of red seeping into my bed all you see is it goin drip...drip...drip your eyes close and your heart beats fast mind boggled and pain that will forever last dropping to your knees tears of pain go drip...drip...drip my dear i know i hurt you so my pain was worse so i let the moment go drip...drip...drip (end) so whatcha think? i am the tears that fall, you are the blood on my skin, we are mingled forever again, here we stand, hand in hand, but ill let go when my time has come, time for u to fly alone
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02-07-2008, 04:49 PM
 Wonderful imagery in the sickly drip poem  . I wasn't a big fan of the uneven syllable meter but the last four lines were really really good! Very evoking poem.Leap of faith was an interesting read. It starts out with rhyme schemes and even a palpable meter but lets go of those rhymes in between. As a deep thinker and an optimist and more significantly as a big fan of your poetry, I tend to think of that as a pointed effort to show that as the main character made a leap of faith away from their old love so did the poem by moving away from rhyme scheme. It's a very interesting concept Awesome as always Yuri-chan! Can't wait for more! ^_^ *hugs* Omae mo kanjite no ka... kaze no koe?
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02-07-2008, 07:13 PM
haha i need to get better for you, you think to much about it and tend to get the right concept hahaha
i am very glad you like my poems, i will type up more tonight for you and post them here i am the tears that fall, you are the blood on my skin, we are mingled forever again, here we stand, hand in hand, but ill let go when my time has come, time for u to fly alone
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Your Lies -
02-08-2008, 01:28 AM
here is another poem i wrote today:
Your lies Can’t you hear? The wind is calling Can’t you see? My heart is longing Why cant you Let you fingers go crawling Against my skin Walking blindly down the hall I hear sounds Echo all around My fingers go raw against these walls I cry my tears when you aren’t around Six feet under below the ground I hear nothing not one sound Seeking out what cant be found My eyes sown shut with your lies Your looks deceive me You deceive my eyes Deceive me still My heart full of lies Oh how I wish to see blue skies To still be burdened I should rather die Under the moon The sun The sky Maybe one day I shall see through your lies (end) i am the tears that fall, you are the blood on my skin, we are mingled forever again, here we stand, hand in hand, but ill let go when my time has come, time for u to fly alone
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